Second Star to the Right (Part II) ~ SGA (McShep)

[atlantis_chat]

Title: Second Star to the Right
Author: icantfollow
Characters: Rodney McKay/John Sheppard
Prompt: #046 Star
Word Count: ~11,000
Genre: AU
Rating: PG13
Summary: Rodney's pretty sure that if his time with John hasn't scarred him for life, then at the very least he's going to grow up with a fish fetish.

Part I

Comments

[neek_love]

Beautiful!
I'm so glad that you didn't sugar coat this, and actually captured the kind of twisted side of Peter Pan! Rodney's realisation that he and Jeannie have to grow up, Rodney and John's fight and Radek's death are just hearbreaking...
And this -
Rodney shakes his head, though it hurts so much colors burst in front of his eyes. He pulls Jeannie in close and strokes her hair with his awkward, bloodied, adult hands.

"It doesn't really work like that," he whispers
Kills me.

Beautiful!

[titc]

Oh, wow - heartbreaking & bittersweet & very, very moving! you captured the essence, the drama of the Peter Pan tale; and you made everything better too at the end.
♥

[gweneiriol]

This is just fabulous and I loved it! thanks for sharing!

[dr_dredd]

Wow. Really well done. In a way, Atlantis really is Neverneverland. John and Rodney always act like big kids, and Radek sometimes has to be the voice of reason.

Killing fairy-Radek made me tear up, but the last line made up for it! :-)

[very_rotten]

Okay, I've been trying to write a decent feedback for this story since last night, because it deserves it, but I can't make the words work. So I just want you to know that this whole story had me nearabout crying (in a good way?) because Peter Pan has always made me cry for reasons I can't even fathom.

John calling Rodney his shadow was the first bit and all the way through I was grinning and feeling heart-tugs. And then Radek dying and Rodney killing the queen were really powerful moments, but the part that really had me was the ending.

John (and Teyla?) leaving Atlantis and growing up and not remembering. Rodney not remembering either but there's still something there that keeps them looking toward each other. It's so sad and hopeful. I hope everything turns out well for them.