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Back to Basics Challenge - Fic: Pas de Deux - Part 5: Coda (G-R) for insight2

Aug 25, 2007 03:06

Coda - Conclusion

"Over here!" Ronon called. He studied a Genii soldier with bound hands and feet, bent to feel for a pulse, and started when the soldier flinched at his touch.

Lorne arrived first, followed by Teyla and the other Marines. "He's alive," Ronon said.

"Well, at least we know we're headed in the right direction," one of ( Read more... )

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nuetronorange August 25 2007, 18:51:18 UTC

Great story, action adventure, Rodney whump and McShep beginning, lovely. Thanks.

neevebrody August 27 2007, 10:30:01 UTC

Hey, thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.

lishel_fracrium August 29 2007, 08:25:51 UTC

ooh who's the hotties on your icon?

nuetronorange August 29 2007, 08:34:10 UTC

They're Tanner and Spence from Seancody.com, very hot pairing.

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lavvyan August 25 2007, 21:50:15 UTC

Well, I already told you I liked this, so I'm kind of at a loss now. *g*

I saw you changed the beginning, though. It works really well the way it is now. :D

neevebrody August 25 2007, 22:10:29 UTC

I'm glad you liked it. Yes, your advice about a few of the details was really great and I think by making those changes, it seemed more believable and a better story - like in the shack with Rodney and at the beginning with Lorne. Thanks so much! ::hugs::

lavvyan August 25 2007, 22:17:38 UTC

You're welcome! *hugs*

Maybe next time I can even do a proper beta. ;)

neevebrody August 25 2007, 23:13:36 UTC

Next time definitely something a little pornier!

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neevebrody August 26 2007, 12:14:57 UTC

I'm really, really glad you liked it. I don't know why SGA couldn't have done something like that scene for Sheppard and Kolya (but, I don't think Kolya's really dead... so we'll see - maybe I should send a copy to Martin Gero ( ... )

ozsaur August 26 2007, 22:18:16 UTC

This confrontation between John and Kolya is much better than what we got in canon. Much more satisfying and a much better ending for John's nemesis. I enjoyed the story line, and the way John and Rodney finally came together. Wonderful story!

neevebrody August 27 2007, 10:28:50 UTC

Thank you. I'm so glad you liked it. I don't think anyone who is a real fan of the show is satisfied with the canon confrontation between Kolya and Sheppard. Personally, I'm not so sure Kolya is really dead and I think we'll see him again. Maybe next time we can get something worthy of that rivalry.

lishel_fracrium August 29 2007, 08:27:00 UTC

OMG! I love this scenario! and I love this story the ending was awesome. I hope to see more from you!

neevebrody August 29 2007, 16:24:15 UTC

Thank you for your nice comments. I'm really glad you liked it. I'm so glad the ending worked, I was kind of worried. I will be happy not to write under a deadline, but I have several WIP going, so there will be more soon.