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Back to Basics Challenge - Fic: Pas de Deux - Part 5: Coda (G-R) for insight2

Aug 25, 2007 03:06

Coda - Conclusion

"Over here!" Ronon called. He studied a Genii soldier with bound hands and feet, bent to feel for a pulse, and started when the soldier flinched at his touch.

Lorne arrived first, followed by Teyla and the other Marines. "He's alive," Ronon said.

"Well, at least we know we're headed in the right direction," one of ( Read more... )

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melagan August 29 2007, 17:23:36 UTC

I enjoyed your story very much, and now I think the boys should snuggle :)

neevebrody August 29 2007, 17:58:17 UTC

Thank you so much - really glad you liked it.

and now I think the boys should snuggle

Hmmm, does that mean you'd like me to write the "missing scene?" 'Cuz, you know, I could probably have my arm twisted.

melagan August 29 2007, 19:52:28 UTC

You definitely need to write the missing scene. Have pity on an old porn floozy

(Did that work?)

neevebrody August 29 2007, 20:53:07 UTC

::rubs arm:: Yeah, okay-- I'll write the missing scene.

Actually, I've already started ;) Any special requests??

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mangst August 30 2007, 21:53:28 UTC

I really liked the dynamics between all the different characters you had in this. :)

neevebrody August 31 2007, 17:42:27 UTC

Hey, thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

nakedwesley August 31 2007, 16:14:05 UTC

I really enjoyed your story! Lots of nice h/c and a much better ending to the Sheppard/Koyla feud. This really felt like an episode. The characters are great and I like the action and flow of the story.

neevebrody August 31 2007, 17:47:43 UTC

I really appreciate your kind comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Yes, we should have gotten and ending kind of like this in canon between Sheppard and Kolya. (and we still may, I don't think Kolya's really dead) ;)

terribilita December 28 2007, 07:27:19 UTC

Oh my goodness, what a wonderful story you've written here! If I had been sitting down while reading I can assure you I'd have been on the edge of my seat, especially during chapters one and two. I mean, god, the build up to finding Rodney and then when they finally do! Oh, my woobie. I loved that you used the whole team and Lorne. And then the showdown with Kolya--you did it justice when the show itself never managed to. And then that first kiss and the misunderstanding that follows. Angst! And and and! *flail*

Thanks for writing this. :)

neevebrody December 29 2007, 17:45:21 UTC

Thank you so much, I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. This was my first challenge fic and I think I'd only been writing for a couple of months at that. I kind of cringe when I read some of this over now and maybe someday, I'll find the time to polish it up a bit. I did love the story though, and yes, I think as viewers we deserved a much better ending to the Sheppard/Kolya feud.

roxy_palace February 10 2008, 05:57:10 UTC

You are one awesome story teller lady!

neevebrody February 10 2008, 07:06:18 UTC

Oh God, you read this? This was my first ever challenge fic and probably only my second or third writing effort. One of these days I want to go back and polish it up. I ran out of time to develop some of the points in the story they way I wanted to and got some bad advice on some things that I had to cut out of it. But I did enjoy writing it because of the way we had to stick so close to canon and writing the whole Team, especially Ronon and Lorne was loads of fun.

I'm certainly glad you were intrepid enough to read it and enjoyed it. ;)

roxy_palace February 10 2008, 18:37:23 UTC

No, it was great...great balance of action and romance. And the scene with John and Rodney in the shack was just gorgeous!

When I find a fic writer I like I tend to read everything they've done, so I'm not stalking you! I'm just being thorough! I don't want to miss anything!

neevebrody February 10 2008, 19:31:29 UTC

Oh, I didn't think you were stalking me - it's just that some of that earlier work kind of makes me cringe when I look at it now. I suppose all writers feel that way. Don't want to stop you from reading at all! *g* I did a mini_nanowrimo project that you might like. It was 30 fics, ficlets, drabbles, in 30 days, all episode related, all about the growing relationship between John and Rodney - staring with Rising and going all the way to S4. Now some of those were rough, but consider - conceiving, writing, editing and posting all in a single day! (And all with a full time job). I was totally exhausted by month's end and thought I'd never want to write again, but the exercise actually served it's purpose in helping me to write every day and improve (I hope) my writing a little. Just click on the mini_nanowrimo tag ( ... )

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