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audreybuttercup

LJ Idol Exhibit A-Throw Back The Little Ones

Jan 29, 2013 15:42

*There's a nail in the door
And there's glass on the lawn
Tacks on the floor
And the TV is on
And I always sleep with my guns when you're goneThe light was too quick for her. She always forgot about that damned tin pie plate hanging in the garden, the 6 pm sunbeam hit her in the eyes every time. She made another mental note to move the thing. ( Read more... )

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baxaphobia January 29 2013, 18:51:59 UTC

Oh this is unnerving! Very well written!

audreybuttercup January 29 2013, 20:25:04 UTC

:grin: Thanks Bax. I wasn't sure about doing fiction...

az_starshine January 29 2013, 23:24:58 UTC

Wow, you gave me the heebie jeebies! Good stuff.

audreybuttercup January 29 2013, 23:30:30 UTC

:laughs: Honestly? I kind of gave myself the heebie jeebies too. :D I don't know where this entry came from, it's not my normal style. But I had to get it out or I was going to burst!

Thanks for the comment, my stomach has hurt ever since I wrote it wondering if it was good enough.

kandigurl January 30 2013, 06:16:52 UTC

I loved the way the lyrics were intertwined with the story. It gave the whole piece a rhythmic feel!

audreybuttercup January 30 2013, 21:12:12 UTC

Oh thank you for saying that!! I have had such a mixed bag of thoughts about the lyrics and I've always loved it when writers added them. And I just love this song!

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audreybuttercup January 30 2013, 21:13:08 UTC

Thank you. :) Honest opinion, do you feel like I maybe should have fleshed it out more? I've been angsty about this entry since I posted it and I would relish the feedback.

I love lyrics in a short story, I really do. It gives it a tempo.

zephyrly January 30 2013, 21:01:55 UTC

It's great to see another horror fiction writer.

audreybuttercup January 30 2013, 21:13:54 UTC

I was relieved when I saw your entry I have to admit. I was afraid I was going to be the only person in this contest who ever got that horror itch.

zephyrly January 30 2013, 21:16:42 UTC

Writing horror is what I do best. For this week's entry, though, I had to turn it down a bit -- and remember that I'm as verbose as Lovecraft, which isn't a nice way to write an LJ Idol entry.

audreybuttercup January 30 2013, 22:57:03 UTC

Ooohhh Lovecraft. I have a Cuthulhu love icon on my other journal that I just adore.

Have you ever read Neil Gaiman's crossover Sherlock Holmes/Lovecraft? He weaves those old ones in so well. And Sherlock Holmes....:girly sigh: