Spanish composition

[aus_silja]

Here is my Spanish composition, please comment on any problems you see with my dreadful grammar. Thanks

Comments

[raynbo0701]

Hi. I'm not a native speaker, but I thought I'd try to help anyway. Comments in parentheses

[widerspruchlich]

Tienes que quitar la "o" de primero, es un apócope. Cuando hay una palabra que se termina con una "o"(como uno, alguno, etc)y está antes de un sustantivo masculino singular, hay que quitar la "o". e.g.: "Un buen día"/"Un día muy bueno"

[aus_silja]

Thanks for your help guys, I'm going to be working on this for a while, I think...

Sorry about the random letters, this thing involved putting a story together from some jumbled pictures, so I had to include which order they were in. The letters refer to which pictures the text refer to.