It's Been A While

[bamboosticks]

Ms. Seal said that my edgy poetry is my most original stuff. So I wrote this poem a while ago and I didn't like it, so I made it rhyme which I think improved it. I'm still not sure what I think of it though so let me know what you guys think

Comments

[sweetbone]

damn, that's awesome...

[domo_kuun]

hmm....i can't sat its my favorite of yours, but its definitely good, catchy in an interesting way. It seems like the song lyrics of a band, it has that staccato feel and, iuno, the diction or something. Good job.

[nedi_chan]

i agree. . it does seem like song lyrics. .
and i agree with magniloquentmir. .. not seeing the edgyness there. . .
good stuff though. ^.^

[magniloquentmir]

it's pretty, but i'm not really seeing "edgy"

[pearlywites]

oh...my...god! i loved it. it truley gave me shivers at the end "...there's plenty of nothing to do." it is one of the favorite things i have read. i love you!

[pearlywites]

ok, sorry for the "groupie-ness" of that comment