Comments | beldarzfixon: Recycled

beldarzfixon

Recycled

Jan 29, 2013 21:25

Buddy was furious.

Through force of will the soles of his small soul-feet made big echo-y noises in the great white halls. Childish? Maybe, but look at him; all he’d ever been was a child. The toddler spirit willed the door open without knocking and stomped into the Assignment Angel’s office.

“This has to stop. I demand to speak to someone in charge ( Read more... )

lj idol, exhibit a

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beldarzfixon January 30 2013, 03:57:55 UTC

Glad to be of help =)

magenta_girl January 30 2013, 03:00:31 UTC

Wow, I love this!

beldarzfixon January 30 2013, 03:58:04 UTC

Thanks!

theun4givables January 30 2013, 03:32:55 UTC

Hah, I liked the ending of this. Of course Buddy finally gets a chance to live a full life and finally gives back in the only way he'd probably prefer. :) Good job.

beldarzfixon January 30 2013, 04:04:33 UTC

Kinda makes all that he had to endure through the ages pay off. Thanks!

I confess, at first I only had the story thought up through his rebirth as "Angela" -- the big dark punchline. Then I realized I had presented a character with nothing but deathdeathdeathdeathdeath and probably set up for another horrible demise at the end just for a cheap laugh. Given all the mothers in the Idol community, I risked a virtual raking over very hot coals if I didn't put a better spin on this. So I did. And I think it's better for it.

theun4givables January 30 2013, 04:07:18 UTC

(You're talkin' to one of the many mothers in the Idol community -- I wouldn't have raked you over the coals for it. ;) )

I actually saw the Angela punchline coming -- but when you did the twist where she got to live and help OTHERS live, that really did make the story that much better. Because it wasn't what the reader had come to expect. So good job. :)

beldarzfixon January 30 2013, 04:10:18 UTC

Thanks. These stories sometimes surprise me with the way they go -- especially when I see the pieces click like it was the way it should have gone all along. I'll accept your "mom" seal of approval. =)

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alien_writings January 30 2013, 03:57:26 UTC

I really liked the ending to this story. Good job! :)

beldarzfixon January 30 2013, 04:11:06 UTC

Thanks! (see conversation with theun4givables)

halfshellvenus January 30 2013, 05:12:06 UTC

every time I’m ‘Angela’ I go in the most painful ways.
That just cracked me up. And the ensuing appearance as an 'Angela' once again.

Nice take on the prompt, and really snappy and funny. :D

beldarzfixon January 30 2013, 18:45:42 UTC

Thanks!

Wonder if I'll hear from any Angelas on this (I mostly know everyone thru screen-names so unsure if there are any)