Comments | beldarzfixon: Tough Crowd

beldarzfixon

Tough Crowd

Mar 16, 2014 22:26

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n3m3sis43 March 19 2014, 10:34:14 UTC

Good one. XD

beldarzfixon March 19 2014, 18:39:48 UTC

Thanks!

halfshellvenus March 19 2014, 17:13:13 UTC

Cute, but also very, very long!

I think less worldbuilding, more momentum would be my preference. I skimmed mightily, though I did enjoy it. :)

beldarzfixon March 19 2014, 18:42:15 UTC

I acknowledge I did take a chance going so long in such a crowded field. Glad you slogged thru it anyway. Thanks!

(And constructive crit is always welcome -- as I didn't have any time to polish, this felt a bit too first-draft-y to me)

halfshellvenus March 19 2014, 18:45:05 UTC

:D At this point, after the last couple of years, I am definitely used to and a fan of your polished versions.

uncawes March 19 2014, 19:51:15 UTC

Really bad joke, really well presented.

beldarzfixon March 20 2014, 04:43:13 UTC

Thanks!

lrig_rorrim March 19 2014, 22:18:41 UTC

I enjoyed this - the awkward nerves came through really well.

beldarzfixon March 20 2014, 04:44:19 UTC

I'm glad. I like the practice at trying to get character emotions across.

jem0000000 March 19 2014, 23:02:22 UTC

Awww. :)

beldarzfixon March 20 2014, 04:44:31 UTC

=) Thanks!

jem0000000 April 5 2014, 06:46:06 UTC

You're welcome.