Painful Silence

[betelin_notecor]

Title : Painful Silence
Chapter: 2/5
Author : betelin_notecor
Chapter Rating : G
Overall Rating: PG-13
Word Count : ~5, 300
Characters : Albus/Scorpius, Rose
Disclaimer : Just playing... I'll give them back to JKR when I'm done!

Summary : Al's always been a bit shy, but he's never been afraid to talk to people. That is, he wasn't until Scorpius showed up. Now Al wonders

Comments

[how_obscure]

So obviously you HAVE heard of it. lol.

I can see your line of thinking on the dinner announcement, but I really think that singles him out as being different even more. I think it would be really uncomfortable, which you did portray. I think it would have been better to just tell the teachers and students that he was in class with would come to know what's up too and eventually word would spread. Of course, that leaves an opening for the telephone-effect. Hm. Sorry, this has little bearing on your story. I didn't mean to ramble.

I do think it is maybe a bit unrealistic how everyone reacted, but part of that might just be Slytherin prejudices on my part. I suppose they're not all evil. ;)

Sorry for my nitpicks. I'm still enjoying the story and will continue to read it. I'm interested in seeing how he handles and gets over his issue.

[betelin_notecor]

I really do hate the announcement, and I could have handled it better, but I figured that my headmistress Sinistra is a bit of an idiot, so I'd let it go. This was my first fanfic written in the Harry Potter world, and it needs a lot of work. It was a good learning experience for me though. :)

And yes, it was a bit unrealistic for most everybody to be all happy and kind after that. It was why I left Bole in as a bastard, but that part could use some work too.

I'm glad you like the story though! As I said, it really needs a lot of work, but I do love it for what it is. =P