Ah, well, it is a talent we both do quite well. I just do it in my every day actions and thoughts xD You are talented enough to write them down! I write, but not often. Only when I'm inspired. My whole family thought I was going to be this famous author because I was published in Chicken Soup once :/
XD I would be a perv everyday, but it tends to freak out my friends. I'm not that good at writing often. I'm trying to work on that because I want to be an author someday. You can't exactly write a book if you only write once or twice a week, XD. But it's cool that you were published. Even if you never publish another thing, you can still pull out the book to show people when you're eighty!
"Can you do that morph thing with your dick while you're inside of me?"
*chortles* I... was thinking of that the first time Teddy did that. :D
This fic is seriously awesome. I'm so glad I asked for this, because it made me smile and grin, and Teddy's emotions and the dialogues are great. Thank you! :)
I know. I put that in on a whim and was gonna go back and edit it out, because it's kinda stupid, but then I got to the end and wrote that line and now it's my favorite part. XD But seriously, how hot would that be?
And I'm glad you like it. It was the first time I ever wrote a whole piece in present tense and I was afraid it didn't sound good. Plus I got impatient at the end and started to rush. D=
Was there anything you saw that just didn't seem right? I'm always trying to better my writing, especially when I'm using a new style.
:) I'm very glad you didn't edit it out, because it's something short of pure genius. Very hot, indeed. (Is it bad--and very, very pervy--of me to want to read a sex scene with that now? *_*)
No. I think you did present tense very well. I was going to comment on the fact that it was a bit rushed towards the end (though I can understand; all my endings are rushed, too, mostly because I can't keep deadlines, but); otherwise, it's really well-written and wonderful. :)
No, not pervy. I've wanted to read a sex scene with that in it since I wrote it. I might try to write one, but probably not, simply because I'm not entirely comfortable writing above PG-13. (Though I'll read just about anything. It's somewhat hypocritical, I know.)
Meh, I'll have to go back and edit the end at some point. I tend to lose interest in stories once I've basically "finished" them though, so it probably won't be soon. Plus, I still need to work more on my already-in-progress stories. XD *puts her nose to the grindstone*
I know. That last line just popped into my head and I'm like OMG. 0_0 Yes. They must have morph sex. *o*
And I suppose they could have used magic to fix the couch, but they are living in a rundown Muggle flat, so they didn't want to accidentally expose any Muggles to magic. ('Tis my excuse anyway.) Plus, they are boys and they are horribly lazy. XD
Oh. My. HOLINESS!!!!!!!! Wowie. Wowie wow WOW! I am amazed and humbled by your beautiful and elegant show of perversion, Rissa. I am blown away. Apparently Terri thought too much of herself, thinking she was the biggest deviant around. NOPE! You trump me, lady. You trump me hard. I don't think you can get much more kinky then morphing wiener action, after all. But I have faith, if it is humanly possible to reach beyond morphing wiener kinkiness, that your brain will come up with it. And you will do it in a sweet, lovey way to top it off.
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Very well written, Marissa, I really enjoyed it! You really are quite talented, you know?
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(And I just couldn't let that last line go. I was like, no, it's bad taste, but... meh. It was just too funny to pass up. XD)
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I just do it in my every day actions and thoughts xD
You are talented enough to write them down!
I write, but not often. Only when I'm inspired.
My whole family thought I was going to be this famous author because I was published in Chicken Soup once :/
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I'm not that good at writing often. I'm trying to work on that because I want to be an author someday. You can't exactly write a book if you only write once or twice a week, XD.
But it's cool that you were published. Even if you never publish another thing, you can still pull out the book to show people when you're eighty!
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*chortles* I... was thinking of that the first time Teddy did that. :D
This fic is seriously awesome. I'm so glad I asked for this, because it made me smile and grin, and Teddy's emotions and the dialogues are great. Thank you! :)
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And I'm glad you like it. It was the first time I ever wrote a whole piece in present tense and I was afraid it didn't sound good. Plus I got impatient at the end and started to rush. D=
Was there anything you saw that just didn't seem right? I'm always trying to better my writing, especially when I'm using a new style.
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No. I think you did present tense very well. I was going to comment on the fact that it was a bit rushed towards the end (though I can understand; all my endings are rushed, too, mostly because I can't keep deadlines, but); otherwise, it's really well-written and wonderful. :)
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Meh, I'll have to go back and edit the end at some point. I tend to lose interest in stories once I've basically "finished" them though, so it probably won't be soon. Plus, I still need to work more on my already-in-progress stories. XD *puts her nose to the grindstone*
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And Teddy/James is just hot. XD
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why did i never think of that last line when i fantasize about Teddie/James??
and its soo adorable.
(one thing though, they could've used magic to fix that couch, but meah, the las line composites to all your mistakes)
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And I suppose they could have used magic to fix the couch, but they are living in a rundown Muggle flat, so they didn't want to accidentally expose any Muggles to magic. ('Tis my excuse anyway.) Plus, they are boys and they are horribly lazy. XD
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Wowie. Wowie wow WOW!
I am amazed and humbled by your beautiful and elegant show of perversion, Rissa. I am blown away. Apparently Terri thought too much of herself, thinking she was the biggest deviant around. NOPE! You trump me, lady. You trump me hard.
I don't think you can get much more kinky then morphing wiener action, after all.
But I have faith, if it is humanly possible to reach beyond morphing wiener kinkiness, that your brain will come up with it. And you will do it in a sweet, lovey way to top it off.
Good show, lady! Kudos to you! (=
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Seriously though, I've read a lot and "morphing wiener action" isn't half as kinky as some of the things I've read. XD
Thank you for reading though, I'm always happy when on of my real life peeps enjoys my stories. :)
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