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[billiambl]

John introduced me to a friend of his from Pittsburgh not too long ago. Erin is a small, meek girl working on her MFA in creative writing. I first saw her in a coffee shop where she gave me a folio of her writing in a plain black folder.

If you're one of my friends interested in the whole English thing you probably listened to me completely gushing

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[no_geese]

okay, normally i really hate poems immediately when abnormal spacing is used, but it almost always seems contrived to me. "look how zany i am, some lines are tabbed all over!" the beatniks were the last people to use it and seem original, and even that was a stretch

[billiambl]

A lot of the things she's given me are fun to look at because of the spacing. That black folder has a couple poems that are written on thin strips of paper taped to a sheet with a crazy design on it.

The lines start on the outside then descend into the center in rings, so near the end of it, you notice how fast the design is spinning as you read. It's pretty cool.

[de_rien]

thank you.

[no_geese]

I am assuming this is Erin, and if so, I was going to say "it was nothing" and then I saw the username and thought it was too apt.

Thank you for being cool about constructive criticism. Please keep writing.

[no_geese]

didnt need that but in "but it is almost"

sry

[bobservo]

it's so easy to write poetry in the style of good poetry without actually being good. this is different.

[de_rien]

ah! Thank you.