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bittereternity

as i stare at a masterpiece (pg)

Dec 09, 2009 21:05

Title: as i stare at a masterpiece
Characters: Sheldon, Leonard, Penny (Sheldon/Penny)
Words: 1,705
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: The Big Bang Theory and all its characters do not belong to me.
Summary: Leonard sees them sitting in the dark.

( I want to give you the grace that led me... )

pairing: sheldon/penny, character: leonard hofstadter, fandom: the big bang theory, character: sheldon cooper, character: penny

Comments 24

dashakay December 9 2009, 15:53:48 UTC

Oh wow. I love how spare your use of language was here. This was wonderful!

bittereternity December 10 2009, 12:14:55 UTC

Thank you very much! I wasn't sure if the spare language works in this fandom, I'm really glad that you liked it!

littlewashu2 December 9 2009, 16:48:48 UTC

I really enjoyed this, short and sweet!

bittereternity December 10 2009, 14:55:21 UTC

Thank you!

allthingsholy December 9 2009, 16:53:08 UTC

Um, this is kind of completely fabulous. Like, ridiculously so.

I think what I like abou this so much is you could do it from both S and P's POVs and it would be a totally differen story that I'd probably also be wild about.

Anyway. Awesome.

bittereternity December 10 2009, 14:56:51 UTC

Wow, thank you very much! I thought that I would use Sheldon or Penny's POV at first, but I thought Leonard's would be more suitable here. I'm glad it still made sense.

BTW, icon love! <3

7gifts December 9 2009, 18:56:44 UTC

I like the way you write and this fic particularly is thought provoking and gripping.

I was hurting was Leonard, he didn't deserve the way things panned out. I'm am curious to know the following (this is my not so subtle way of asking for a companion piece or fic commentary):

1. Why did Sheldon buy those bagels for Leonard, what was the reason behind the deviation?
2. What was Penny doing on her PC, who was she communicating with?
3. What were the reasons behind Sheldon's hyperventilation and how did Penny become involved?

bittereternity December 10 2009, 15:35:27 UTC

Wow, thank you very much. I wasn't sure if the way I write exactly worked in TBBT, but I'm glad you think so! Well, the way I saw it every time Sheldon and Penny had an intimate moment, Sheldon would feel some sense of guilt or just a prick of conscience, and he would try to do something nice in his own way, like let Leonard use the bathroom in the morning. I think that Sheldon *would* feel guilty if something like this ever did happen, because despite everything, he still values Leonard's friendship and he didn't know any other way to 'express' his guilt ( ... )

7gifts December 10 2009, 17:38:26 UTC

I'm not a descriptive writer, I tend to work more with spare words and subtle signs so that the reader can perceive the events in any way they want.

Seriously that's cool and your style writing worked well in this fic. I'm a detail person hence my questions. I don't think you should change your writing style because of my questions, I was just curious, wanted to fill the gaps and subtly hinting for a sequel.

bittereternity December 10 2009, 17:48:18 UTC

Oh no, I didn't mean it like that! I was really nervous if it did work and you asking questions made me feel really good actually! Someone taking an interest in my fic enough to ask questions about it is awesome! XD

On another note, I just visited your profile (not in a stalker kind of way, I assure you) and read part of your fic: 'All road lead to Yale' and I really liked the beginning!

Mind if I friend you?

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artic_fox December 9 2009, 19:24:23 UTC

Wow, this is brilliant. I love the way you've handled Leonard's POV and his slow discovery of the situation. Brilliant job - I hope to read more fic from you!

bittereternity December 10 2009, 15:36:24 UTC

Thank you very much! With all your kind words and encouragement, I'll be sure to try and write more. :D