Lessons Learned - Chapter Two

[bloodyxunicorns]

This is being removed for now. I apologize if it's an inconvenience for anyone, but I just feel like it needs some good edits for it to be, well, not embarrassing (for me). I reread through it recently and was a bit horrified by the many grammar problems it has. So for now it's down until I can either edit it and pick it back up, or, well, for good

Comments

[hawk_soaring]

Aw, poor Porter is so confused. Not sure about Nelson but I sense he has a story.;) Collin seems nice though and I think Porter will learn from him. Now Eva -- she's an enigma. Can't wait to learn more about this little group.

[bloodyxunicorns]

Yep, definitely is confused ^^ and Nelson does have a story, they all do in fact ;) As the story progresses you'll find out! Don't want to give anything away right now though...

Anyways, thanks for leaving a comment again, glad you want to learn more about the group!

[brknhalo241]

Another intriguing chapter! Poor Porter....no idea who to trust. I hope things aren't too rough for him.

[bloodyxunicorns]

Yeah, poor Porter O: Can't promise things won't be tough on him though ;)

Thanks for commenting again! Hope the other chapters will be intriguing as well :)

[myscus]

OOO, liking all the complicated histories that seem to be coming up. Looking forward to learning more. i think Nelsonis made uncomfortable by Porter because he sees him as competition, and Collin is more comfortable because he is more sure of his position.

[bloodyxunicorns]

hehe, glad to hear you like the histories/and are looking foward to more :) Thanks for commenting!

[charisstoma]

Eva is the Master's first slave and plump. Yet she is made to eat everything on her plate. I'm wondering why. The Master likes plump women?

Interesting that of the 4 slaves, three of them are male. Collin said that Eva liked to be keep to herself, so her punishment is to be confined to her room? Odd that her Master doesn't realise this is where she wants to be or is this a way for their master to shut her away because he doesn't want to be bothered with her anymore?

Classic family dynamics. Eva is the first female slave. Collin is the first male slave. With Porter coming into the mix, Nelson has lost the 'most recently acquired slave' status and become the middle one; middle children always have the most difficult position and usually act out.

[bloodyxunicorns]

Wow, you have a keen, sharp eye O: I'll see what I can say without revealing anything important. The master actually doesn't prefer plump women, but there is a reason for that scene, which you'll find out as Eva's character progresses. Hm, and about Collin's comment, it'll be revealed how a nice girl who likes to keep to herself would be confined to her room, and how it was a rightly punishment. Meh, hopefully I didn't give anything away. At least not fully... I feel kind of cryptic though, and possibly contradicting since I can't actually outwardly say it/answer anything O: But it's great that your interest definitely seems peaked on her character, she's a bit (which hawk_soaring said) of an enigma

[bloodyxunicorns]

hehe, love that you like the dynamics :) Nelson is a fun character to write. I can't tell you what he has on his agenda for poor little Porter, but he won't just stand around and let him take all their master's attention ;)

You loved the snuggling at the feet scene? I'm glad :) They'll definitely be more scenes like it, I promise that ^^; And I promise, more Lord Pierce :)

Seventeen chapters is enough for me to get into it, despite it not being updated in awhile. Unless the fic seems dead, then I usually don't read it. I'll check it out though since I'm really obsessed with slave/master fics right now, plus since it has lords ^^