Brigits_flame: Unity

[bootler]

"O holy night, the stars are brightly shining, it is the night of our dear saviour's birth."

Lynn paused at the sound of the carolers and let the rush of shoppers move past her. Three weeks out from Christmas and the malls were packed. Every year, Lynn swore to herself that she'd finish gift shopping well in advance. And, every year, she found

Comments

[drippedonpaper]

I really, really liked this. I'm a lot like Lynn, I wait too long and just get...tired of the holiday which in a way is terrible. It's just there are so many expectations this time of year. But the wonder IS captured in music if I will just listen.

Thanks for writing this, it really warmed my heart when I needed it.

I enjoyed this view into your world. I know for me, what I choose to write about reveals a little of me.

This may be fiction, but either way, I hope you do find some wonder in the craziness this holiday!

Thanks for sharing.

[bootler]

Wow, thank you very much for the positive feedback! There is a lot of me in this, I suppose. Carols are by far my favourite thing about Christmas (and I truly hate gift shopping).

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[zaggytiddies]

This is so true to life... lol I really liked it as well. :Cursing myself for not getting all my shopping done earlier:

[bootler]

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[cedarwolfsinger]

Nice work! I like this, especially since I would be one of the carolers.... Keep smiling!

[bootler]

Thanks!

[insolentscrawl]

Oh, what a fantastic story. That song in particular gets me every time. It reminds me why we celebrate. We have (as a society in the US) become very irresponsible and lost the feeling of the holidays.

This story brings that feeling into sharp focus. Yet the fact that one person recognizes this even for a moment gives me a little hope and makes me want to applaud.

Well done and good luck this week. You've definitely got my vote.

[bootler]

Thanks very much! I agree, it's becoming more and more difficult to actually enjoy the holidays.

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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[wierdauntie]

Hi there,
I really liked this. Thank you!

It was a nice touch, interspersing the italic verses of the song with the description. I can almost hear them singing in my own mind, and I LOVE caroling! We forget how reverent so many of our carols are, and the way you contrasted the awe of the song with the hectic pace of shopping was poignant.

My only other feedback is the last line is a little weak...maybe there's some way to say this more powerfully? "steeling herself to face the joy of Christmas once again." I don't know... play with it.

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[bootler]

Thanks very much for the feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll admit I wasn't entirely sure how to end it, this was written pretty hastily. I could fiddle around with it a bit more.