LJ Idol Week 20 - Love Means Never Having to Say

[boxsofrain]

I was hidden in a wooden box

Comments

[theafaye]

Oooh lovely. One of those rare entries that gives me chills.

[boxsofrain]

Thank you! I felt like going the creepy route this week. :)

[kittenboo]

wow, creepy, pulled me right in!

[boxsofrain]

Thank you! I am glad you like it.

[genesisdesire]

Interesting. And yet it felt like a slap in the face to the girl that heard those words. I can't be sure what you were going for here, but it's unsettling.

[boxsofrain]

That is exactly what I was going for. I wanted to go the creepy route this week.

[rhiannnnnnon]

love this. love that you are trying to inject some science-y thinking. don't be afraid to go too far with it though. even if your audience doesn't understand EVERYTHIGN you're saying, it can be like poetry & just getting the gist of it is enough (like when listening/learning a foreign language).

[boxsofrain]

Thank you! Sometimes I do worry about getting too sciency. But you make a good point on how it could be like poetry.

I am excited I got my tenses right in this one. ;)

[pricelessone]

This is so trippy. It totally unsettles me, because I've seen abusive relationships (not that extreme, but still.) It's so true that some people would take a bullet and consider it love, or that they deserved it. At the same time you paint a stunningly real mental picture of being hidden in the box. My first thought was of a warped game of hide and seek. It's poetic. And twisted logic all at the same time. This makes us feel and react, which is always a good thing.

[boxsofrain]

Thank you so much. I really am happy you came by and read this, and also was able to react to it. I wanted to try something different, and write a creepy and unsettling story.