Don't be silly. This is your story. I just do some tweaking while you work out your English. Which is improving with each chapter. However, I just noticed a mistake in the last sentence. You need to edit it to say "You're not going anywhere, Ryan." Leaving out the "not" changes the whole meaning of the sentence.
I've just done the update (I can't concentrate on my virtual life enough when I'm at work : it's such a shame!!). I'm really grateful for the great job you did on this fanfic because I'm not always well-informed about what American children learn in class or eat during birthday parties ('Hostess cupcakes' : I had to google in to know what it was! When I went to LA, I basically lived on icecream and bagels and didn't taste all the American food). You made this fanfic more realistic and pleasant for the readers! So thank you!
What a great update. And what a mean thing to say to a little boy. Especially coming from his own mother. *hugs the poor little woobie*
I want to comment more detailed, but right now my thoughts are way to jumbled because my emotions are still all over the place after this heartwrenching update.
i think this has been my favorite chapter, to see ryan at times doing so much better and then have dawn show up like that, although its totally fine by me cuz afterwords kirsten and sandy really prove to him that he's staying, its so sweet with them all acting as a family and ryan letting them in
Thanks for commenting! The Cohens + Ryan's relationship is why I really liked the show, so in my fanfic, I choose to develop it. And five year old Ryan is easier to help than tough fifteen year old Ryan, I guess!
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I'm really grateful for the great job you did on this fanfic because I'm not always well-informed about what American children learn in class or eat during birthday parties ('Hostess cupcakes' : I had to google in to know what it was! When I went to LA, I basically lived on icecream and bagels and didn't taste all the American food). You made this fanfic more realistic and pleasant for the readers!
So thank you!
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And what a mean thing to say to a little boy.
Especially coming from his own mother. *hugs the poor little woobie*
I want to comment more detailed, but right now my thoughts are way to jumbled because my emotions are still all over the place after this heartwrenching update.
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The Cohens + Ryan's relationship is why I really liked the show, so in my fanfic, I choose to develop it. And five year old Ryan is easier to help than tough fifteen year old Ryan, I guess!
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