Comments | brian_goodwin: Kleenex and Corruption on Shaker Street

brian_goodwin

Kleenex and Corruption on Shaker Street

Mar 11, 2007 01:16

Another portion of the Emerson application, if you want to take film courses, has you submit a short script sample. In this I basically just wanted a story that revolved around a modern day, average guy who envisions himself some sort of Film Noir detective, and watch him react to sane people in an everyday, mundane siuation. It could only be 5 ( Read more... )

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irishbassmaster March 11 2007, 17:00:58 UTC

stop being so damned good... its people like you that keep people like me from getting accepted there

brian_goodwin March 11 2007, 20:20:57 UTC

You applied? Awesome. Do you know anyone else from your grade who applied?

irishbassmaster March 11 2007, 21:56:30 UTC

nope, not a clue

orestes137 March 20 2007, 03:37:03 UTC

pretty damn good. you forgot the exterior "EXT." for STREETS OF BOSTON- NIGHT

but creative idea. I'm taking a screenwriting class right now and it was interesting to read your little sequence.

I also read your other essays and loved them. some of your sentences are a little verbose, but stylizlized to say the least.

brian_goodwin March 20 2007, 18:55:42 UTC

Thanks. I haven't taken a screenwriting class before, but I've read screenplays online so I think I have a vague idea what they're supposed to look like.

Yeah, I can be really verbose - sometimes I write in short snatches, working and re-working simple sentences until they're huge. And, even though they're more interesting and have more ideas when you look at them individually, sometimes they hurt the pacing of the story or essay as a whole.