What a gorgeous, atmospheric start. (And Mark!fic - which clearly pleased me.)
there’s a part that resents she can walk away from this (from him): this is a great thought. His instinct was to run, and now he's absolutely stuck. I can absolutely see him feeling this way.
Also, I loved (in a kind of cringing for Mark way) the idea that he has to hide in his own apartment, until Sloan is out of the way. And his pessimism over the whole thing is heartbreaking, especially because he's making himself do the right thing.
Awesome writing - every word worked so well; awesome start!
Thanks! The resentful thing just came at me while I wrote - glad you like it :D Sometimes I feel sorry for Mark =( The guy just never seems to catch a break.
Thank you for the lovely words. I appreciate it! =)
really, REALLY awesome. i love the image of mark on the bed and his feeling of entrapment (which is really a great and true observation).
i'd say more but i have to go and pay attention to the scientific revolution AP Euro (posting from my phone). but thanks for giving this (and me! :D) a great start to go by!
"An estranged pregnant 18 year-old didn’t figure into his plans. (Briefly he chuckles at the irony. Of course it would be his daughter that would get knocked up.)"
You're right. That is irony, right there.
A wonderful start :) I would write more but I am at the end of my first day at a new job and really, at this point, it's amazing I still know my own name. [Although, FYI, no first day is ever draining enough that'd I forget Mark's name ;)]
Thanks :D Don't worry - it was my first day back to Uni today, so I can totally sympathize with the not knowing your name feeling! Thanks for taking the time to read =)
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there’s a part that resents she can walk away from this (from him): this is a great thought. His instinct was to run, and now he's absolutely stuck. I can absolutely see him feeling this way.
Also, I loved (in a kind of cringing for Mark way) the idea that he has to hide in his own apartment, until Sloan is out of the way. And his pessimism over the whole thing is heartbreaking, especially because he's making himself do the right thing.
Awesome writing - every word worked so well; awesome start!
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Thank you for the lovely words. I appreciate it! =)
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i'd say more but i have to go and pay attention to the scientific revolution AP Euro (posting from my phone). but thanks for giving this (and me! :D) a great start to go by!
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Part Two (I went a bit overboard.)
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Part Three
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You're right. That is irony, right there.
A wonderful start :) I would write more but I am at the end of my first day at a new job and really, at this point, it's amazing I still know my own name. [Although, FYI, no first day is ever draining enough that'd I forget Mark's name ;)]
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Part 4
*SLEEPS*
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