Addiction

[camouflagecat]

Title: Addiction
Pairing: GTOP

Genre: Angst, slight smut
Warnings: R to be safe I guess? + swearing
Type: One-shot
Wordcount: 2624
Disclaimer: I don't own Big Bang, just the story I wrote.
Summary: To tell the truth, Jiyong knew something even more addicting than smoking.

A/N I'm new to LJ and this is my first ever attempt on fan fiction. English isn

Comments

[italina_bella]

This is so good, even if English was your first language. You don't seem to have any grammatical errors.

[camouflagecat]

Thank you! I'm glad to hear from people who actually speak english as their mother tongue that it's good ^__^

[elisechoi]

Well written. I love how you elaborated.

[camouflagecat]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[seamanthedog]

Um I definitely think you should make this a two shot. Not only because I really liked it but I need to know more. Darn Ri, why does he have to cockblock the GTop that was happening.

"It was probably the most imperfect perfect kiss Jiyong had had in his life." The whole paragraph about their first kiss was so realistic. It was my favorite part. So awkward and clumsy but like a unexpected, drunken, kiss would be.

[camouflagecat]

Thank you for your comment!
I really liked that line too, I wasn't sure about that part actually and I'm glad I managed to convey the feelings I wanted.

I'd actually thought about a sequel to this in the start because I kinda left the ending open didn't I? But we'll see what happens...

[camouflagecat]

I've been lurking around...

Thank you for commenting ^___^

[cosmoqueen2900]

Awwwwwwwwwwww come on how could you leave it there!! I wanna see them continue this convo!!! LOL XD

[camouflagecat]

Yeah it would be a shame to just leave it like this...
Thank you for commenting!