Comments | carefulsubtlety: fic; "A book of promises written in braille", X-Men First Class; Charles/Erik, NC-17

carefulsubtlety

fic; "A book of promises written in braille", X-Men First Class; Charles/Erik, NC-17

Jun 18, 2011 21:32

Title: A book of promises written in braille
Fandom: X-Men: First Class
Pairing: Charles/Erik
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 5000
Genre: post movie
Copyright: Title from Ani DiFranco's "Heartbreak Even".
Summary: This is Charles Xavier, losing his mind: One memory at a time.

( The pocketwatch on the desk picks up speed, ticking away just a little too fast before it falls back into its rhythm, the spring coil winding itself in its tiny metal body. )

charles/erik, rating: nc-17, fic, x-men

Comments 33

skyearth85 June 18 2011, 23:01:52 UTC

you broke my heart *snif*

carefulsubtlety June 19 2011, 04:19:56 UTC

*hands you tissues* :) thanks for your comment!

non_timebo_mala June 19 2011, 00:15:29 UTC

I really, truly enjoyed this and the story you were trying to tell. So heartbreaking.

However, I say this in the kindest way possible, I'd really recommend getting a beta - there were a lot of smaller errors that would have easily been seen with a second run through. Other than those, I loved it. :]

carefulsubtlety June 19 2011, 04:31:07 UTC

Thank you so much! Heartbreaking was absolutely what i was aiming for.

And yes, I really should have picked up a beta for this - as I'm not a native speaker I tend to do odd things with language and don't notice them afterwards. If I dive back into the fandom again, fic-wise, I'll make sure to find somebody via the community (or blackmail a beta I used to work with to join the fandom. Whichever happens first ;) ). I'm glad you pointed that out!

Thank you for taking time to comment. :)

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carefulsubtlety June 19 2011, 04:31:21 UTC

thank you!

moonlitpines June 19 2011, 03:36:18 UTC

This was a lovely mindfuck. Filled with lots of longing and their mutual loneliness and the refusal to stay away. Call and answer, always with them.

Excellent story, thanks for sharing!

carefulsubtlety June 19 2011, 04:34:31 UTC

thank you! when i wrote the story, i kept wondering if the concept would work out the way i had imagined - i'm really glad to hear that you enjoyed it.

mf_luder_xf June 19 2011, 05:09:15 UTC

Oh, Erik, converting the house. No there are not tears in my eyes, why do you ask? Oh, boys.

"Charles said to me that sometimes it's not enough to love somebody."

That line slays me. So tragic and so true.

A lovely story.

carefulsubtlety June 19 2011, 05:15:59 UTC

Tears? Pff. Nobody here has been crying during the beach scene, either *coughs* Virtual tissue, anyone?

Thank you so much for your comment. <3 I probably shouldn't be feeling this giddy about making people sad, but really, James McAvoy and Michael Fassbender started it with the epic manpain.
It's, like, totally their fault.