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nusseis August 14 2011, 18:07:58 UTC
The maid had wrapped an arm protectively around her abdomen. She was slender still, but with the fabric pulled tight, I could see she wouldn't remain so for much longer.
Oh, that’s Gwen’s mother. Great way to include her in the story!

Love your continued use of showing two possible futures throughout the Vivienne part of this chapter. And I have to say I really like what you’ve done with her character. How she is willing to sacrifice herself for the possibility of a better future.

Yay, Arthur, Merlin and Kilgharrah meeting!

"You're not my servant. You're my equal." ♥

Arthur is affronted. "You've named my sword?" Perfect ending! :D

So in case you didn’t guess it by now I love this story. It was an absolute joy to read. Thank you so much for sharing this story with us and well for writing it in the first place. ;)

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cerisereve August 15 2011, 01:44:13 UTC
It was fantastic to read your thoughts about each of the parts this morning. You made my day!

Vivienne really was the key to the whole story. In the show I was frustrated by the fact that we never knew why Uther betrayed Ygraine and slept with Vivienne and I needed to fill in the gaps by myself.

The two scenes that were hardest for me to write were the Arthur/Gwen one and the conversation Arthur overheard between Merlin and Morgana. I spent weeks stressing over them. From your comments I gather my struggles paid off.

Thank you for spending your Sunday reading my story. I'm glad it was great entertainment. =)

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archaeologist_d August 15 2011, 01:13:18 UTC
I loved the banter and how everyone had a place and a voice in the story. Loved all the backstory of Morgana and Morgause and Vivienne. Great job.

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cerisereve August 15 2011, 01:53:24 UTC
Writing the banter was fantastic fun.

The backstory flashbacks really did form the backbone structure of this story. I'm glad you enjoyed my interpretation of Morgana, Morgause, and Vivienne's histories.

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. =)

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mustangcandi August 18 2011, 17:26:56 UTC
I haven't read this cause I know beans about Merlin, but I just wanted to say YAYOMG it's so nice to see you and to see you posted this! I feel like you talked about it months ago and then... bam! You did it. It's finished! So proud. :)

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cerisereve August 19 2011, 02:39:44 UTC
Hi!

Sure you wouldn't like to know more than beans about Merlin? =) You could advance yourself to cauliflower level if you read the fic. *shamless promotion is now over*

I mentioned it a time or two, then put my nose to the grindstone and did nothing but write and write and write and bang my head against the computer keys in frustration. I'm so glad I finished!

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kathyh August 30 2011, 16:32:28 UTC
I really enjoyed this. I loved the way you managed to make coherent sense of the backstory and the use you made of the mysterious Vivienne. Arthur's voice really shone here but I liked how we got brief flashes of the other characters. The banter between Arthur and Merlin was absolutely gold. Thanks so much for an excellent read :)

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cerisereve August 31 2011, 06:19:54 UTC
Thanks so much for reading and especially for commenting. I'm glad that you enjoyed the story.

After taking a peek at your last couple of journal entries, I must admit I'm even more shocked. Since the story's endgame isn't Arthur/Merlin what piqued your interest enough to read? Not that I'm in the least complaining. Far from it. =)

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kathyh August 31 2011, 08:51:17 UTC
LOL! I was probably a bit misleading with what I wrote there. When I'm watching the series I'm more than happy with Arthur/Gwen and it's my second favourite pairing in fic. Your summary was intriguing and also Arthur-centric, which is another hook for me, and it was canon-based and I needed a change from modern AUs. I liked the opening and so I carried on :)

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cerisereve September 1 2011, 05:58:38 UTC
Back in February when I was drafting story ideas, I wanted to do two things. The first was a magic reveal and the second was to tell a hero's journey story. Arthur was a perfect fit for it. Plus, the show usually gives us Merlin's point of view and I figured Arthur needed a little more love.

If you carried on, then I did something right. =)

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