The Real LJ Idol - Mini-Season - Week 1 - Trust everyone; but cut the cards

[cheapxdate]

This is my entry for Week 1 of LJ Idol (therealljidol).

Comments

[rayaso]

I really liked the back & forth dialogue, which was well done for the age of the girl, and the way the relationship is revealed in connection with the card games. Good job!

[cheapxdate]

Thank you! :)

[voidandblank]

This was fun to read. I liked the pacing as well. Great job!

[cheapxdate]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate the positive pacing feedback. :)

[majesticzaichik]

Hah great job! Team Norbert going strong! I loved the ending especially. Very witty and made me smile! I didnt know that was called the "riffle shuffle'. Intersting, i always heard it called "the bridge".

[cheapxdate]

I actually always called i a "bridge" too! It was only when I was writing this and having trouble properly describing it (without using 'bridge' twice in a sentence) that I looked it up and found out what it was ~technically called lol. GO NORBERT!! ♥

[sinnamongirl]

This is a great progression of their relationship and ages through the dialog. Old Maid as the last game was a real clever choice too :)

[cheapxdate]

Thank you for reading! :)

[morettaallstar]

I like the growing up aspect of this, and can see friends and myself in this, but good gosh, my first thought was "13? 13?! Sit down and go back to reading, girl, you do not need a boyfriend yet!"
Gosh. Definitely a case of older-sisterhood coming out there.
I WISH I could pull off a riffle shuffle! Go "you" for getting it right in the end.

[cheapxdate]

Looking back at some of the things I did and thought when I was younger make me feel so scandalized lol especially with cousins who are in that age group now! Thank you for reading!