I can't believe I finished it with time to spare @A@;;

Sep 21, 2012 09:10

Title: Apoapsis
Prompt: #21 La Douleur Exquise (French) - The heart-wrenching pain of wanting someone you can’t have. (Centers on the one whose love is not returned)
Verse: G1 (although it's vague enough that it can fit anywhere, really)
Rating: PG
Words: 687
Contains: Very brief self-stimulation and lots of angst.
Summary: Jazz held the gravitational ( Read more... )

oneshot, transformers, fanfic

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whitefirebird September 21 2012, 13:30:43 UTC
I...I...Ayayayayai. Ouch. This *hurt*. (I am very empathetic - I can see and feel extremes of emotion from both sides, even just in fiction. Good for charactarisation, bad for angst or horror fic.). This is a good fic though. Interesting that there's no hope for resolution, and both Prowl and Jazz know it. Which makes it hurt more. In a good way, I mean.

I'm going to wibble over Prowl now, even though he was a right aft when I was trying to write the piece for my day 19 prompt. Which will be posted along with 23-prompt. I think my computer will have finished throwing its wobbly by then.

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chibi_veneficus September 21 2012, 21:59:20 UTC
I can completely understand being empathetic towards the characters you're reading! I have shed many a tear over emotional stories and I actually cried a bit when I first started writing this since I knew how it was going to end. Because, sometimes, things just don't work out. >:

I can't wait for your next update!! :D I absolutely love Alegria and how you're fleshing out Prowl and Jazz's relationship and personal backgrounds. (I'm sorry I haven't reviewed yet - I'm horrible about doing so but I'll make sure to leave a comment on the next chapter *determined face*)

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purajo September 21 2012, 15:52:47 UTC
*hugs Prowl* oh Prowl I so know how that feels... I can really feel Prowl's ache and frustration here. It really sucks when you're trying not to crush on someone and they're being awesome right in front of you.

I love the imagery of 'fly too close to the sun and you'll get burned' you've used here

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chibi_veneficus September 21 2012, 22:21:43 UTC
Yeah, it's really hard to stop liking someone when they keep being amazing and you can't exactly tell them to stop being themselves since that's who you fell for and arg it can be a such a mess ;_;

Thank you! I tried to keep the idea of Jazz being something beautiful and untouchable consistent by comparing him with a sun throughout the story and I'm happy to see that it worked. :)

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kida_bridger September 21 2012, 16:14:26 UTC
Poor Prowl, But thats life sometimes i guess. Makes me wanna hug him too though lol. Very nice work on this.

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chibi_veneficus September 21 2012, 22:23:36 UTC
Prowl needs all the hugs after this fic. >:

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

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anonymous September 21 2012, 18:23:17 UTC
You're aliiiiive! YES! :D

This was an ouch-worthy read, to be sure. I winced a few times when Prowl talked about how Jazz was trying to make it friendship rather than infatuation...poor Prowl. He really does do everyhting with his whole spark, holding nothing back.

On a different note, do you still have plans for Verumi? I know you've been asked +infinity times, but inquiring minds are ever inquisitive. ^_^ If not, how would it have ended? Caste 'Verse? Only curious, not pushing for chapters- just very interested in how things could have/will go. Thanks!

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chibi_veneficus September 21 2012, 22:34:19 UTC
ONLY BARELY *flops around*

Jazz was trying to help, really! He just didn't realize that Prowl's infatuation was something a little bit more powerful and that he was doing more harm than good. :C

Ah yes, Verumi. I honestly haven't looked at it much (I am easily distracted by just about everything) but I really do want to complete it. I already know what I want to do, just need to get the words out. It's the same with Caste - I actually have the next chapter completed so you may be seeing that in a few days ^_~ and I honestly don't mind being poked about this stuff so feel free to poke away!

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wicked3659 September 21 2012, 19:07:29 UTC
Awww this is so sad :s *wibbles and sobs in the corner* I can relate so much to Prowl, I want to hug him! Dx a very fitting fill :3 nicely done!

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chibi_veneficus September 21 2012, 22:37:17 UTC
! D: *hands out tissues*

Thank you! Sad prompt was very sad but I'm very happy that I managed to do a good job on it.

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