75 - Just Breathe

[chosenone]

My first entry for the 100songs challenge!

Title: Just Breathe
Fandom: Firefly
Characters: Mal, Kaylee, Jubal Early
Prompt: Table 1, #75
Word Count: 892
Rating: PG-13

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Comments

[xx_squish_xx]

This was quite excellent! Good character voices and really good use of the song prompt.

[chosenone]

Thanks! I appreciate your feedback.

This challenge will be a big one for me because I find it hard to drabble-length fiction.

Glad the first one seemed to turn out okay...:-)

[arwen_lune]

Oh! Very dear. I love Mal and Kaylee interaction and this was lovely.

[chosenone]

Thank you!

I just love the way their personalities work so well together...even though it might not seem that way at first glance.

[anxiety_junkie]

This is very good! You know if Joss was given more time he would have addressed Kaylee's obvious trauma, but of course he wasn't. Given more time, that is. *throws rocks at Fox*

[chosenone]

Thanks!

It would have been some really interesting stuff for Jewel to sink her teeth into, that's for sure. *re-supplies you with rocks*

[emeraldswan]

Very well done. I wish we'd seen something like this on the show.

[chosenone]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.

As noandwhere said, we probably would have seen the fallout...if there'd been the opportunity!

[kiaforrest]

loved this: “’Course it’s you, Cap’n. Who else would it be?”
Mal studied her for a long moment. “You wanna tell me why my mechanic’s greasing the engine with her tears so late at night?” and this willed the right words to come to him out of the black. the best!

Nice pace - the moment was very them. Thanks for sharing this!

[chosenone]

That second line was my favorite (ha - assuming it's not pretentious to have a "favorite line" in your own fic! :-P)

Thanks for the feedback.