Cult of Color (LJi s8e6)

[cloworora]

Boastful ramblings of personal achievement used to drone on for hours. I loathed every word. In an age when people seemed so wholly consumed with themselves, I grew steadily modest to stem the tide of vanity. In retrospect, it might have been more to mask my insecurity. I simply didn’t consider myself extraordinary. She was remarkable, though;

Comments

[jem0000000]

I love the last line -- it's as if the speaker is grateful for the chance to experience the memory again, because it's so beautiful even tho its painful.

[cloworora]

I wanted to roll the "love at first sight" trope into the famous quote from Lord Tennyson's poem "In Memoriam:27", "'Tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all." ...In the end, the effect does come out a bit bittersweet, though the man is eternally grateful to tell the story.

I'm glad you love that line and thought it beautiful. Thank you for reading.

[jem0000000]

Definitely bittersweet. :)

You're welcome. :)

[ecosopher]

Regret, painful beauty, nostalgia. Gorgeous piece.

[cloworora]

Thank you for reading my words. That's what makes them pretty; people reading them. Otherwise, I'd simply be a semi-crazy guy writing a list of poetic feelings that no one else knows.

[iamthesea]

So original and well written. Love it!

[cloworora]

I do try to be original, yes. I have a few qualms with this piece in the actual writing. Not the story, but some of the actual punctuation or word choices weren't as strong here as I thought they could've been. Thank you for reading and your kind words, however.

[myrna_bird]

This fulfilled a hunger of a non-food nature. Beautiful imagery.

[cloworora]

I am glad you are fed. The imagery was the most fun to write here. Thanks for reading.

[n3m3sis42]

Whoa. Trippy. I enjoyed it.

[cloworora]

Cool! Enjoyment is what I had in mind.