Eldrid Unne (LJi s8e14)

[cloworora]

CHORUS: A “modern” Greek chorus in masks, led by a person who wears a brown Domo baseball cap

ASH LAD: A perplexed young man, entangled in the world around him

RAVEN FELLOWS: Ash’s misguided guiding light, a leader of the pack

LILIN AGRAT: Fellows’ girlfriend and consort

ANTSY PIX: One of the pack and Ash’s best friend

PENELOPE WILLS: A beautiful, older

Comments

[basric]

Very interesting choice of format. Well done.

[cloworora]

I think I took alephz's advice of not being a one trick pony a little too close to heart. Thank you for reading.

[sonophax]

Wow! I was really impressed by this. You have an uncanny knack to adapt yourself to every style I've seen you attempt so far without losing a centimeter of that incisive brand of wit. I'm not sure I would've been able to write something as a one act play, let alone one so sleekly constructed. You rock!

[cloworora]

I know you are, but what am I?

[lawchicky]

Oh- really unexpected here- I liked this a lot.

[cloworora]

Enjoy it while you can. I don't think I'll be writing another one act play anytime soon. Thanks for reading.

[alien_infinity]

He holds onto a child’s mind in vain.

I liked this line a lot.

[cloworora]

Thank you.

[whipchick]

Fun excursion in style! And it's interesting how all of your characters have deeper meanings, too.

[cloworora]

Well, I made a choice. I can include hidden references that become a Kaufman-esque inside joke that only I get or I include takes on further literary cues and give the foundation for some of the ideas. I think the latter works out better.

Thank you for reading.