APTF [5/?]

[coconutjack]

Title: A Prayer Time Forgot
Length: Chaptered [5/?]
Rating: NC17 now, to be safe.
Genre: Umm. Unsure. Angst, supernatural, generally. Weirdness. We'll see.
Pairing: Yes, there are pairings. (Gasp! A first!) I'm guessing it's YunJae.
Summary: It’s an empty playground they wind up in, swings, slides, seesaws glinting under the weak moonlight; sheen of

Comments

[chloe1910]

oh gosh..I dunno what to think any more....I'm kinda blur now actually

Did I read wrongly that child Jaejoong is actually dead and Yunho actually saw his corpse? The little black hair boy that Yoochun is seeing sound eerily like Yunho's freind, Jaejoong...so, the ghost is back to haunt Yunho and Yoochun(Yoochun being Siwon's son)?

But the adult Jaejoong sounds so nice...and he doesn't sound harmful. I'm not sure how the little black hair boy and Jaejoong is connected but somehow, both appears almost at the same time in Yunho's and Yoochun's life...

This chapter is giving me the goosebumps.....

[coconutjack]

ah my faithful chloe-sshi. you are stumped, yes? don't worry, things will fall into place. ^^

as for clarifications: yes, boy!jj is dead and proof of that is yunho had seen the corpse since he had gone to the wake. the boy IS the same one from yunho's past. i'm not going to give any final word on adult!jj though. ^^ mian.

*offers you a nice sweetie for giving you the goosebumps*

[chloe1910]

yes..coconutjack-shi..you can expect nothing less from me..I'm your all faithful stalker-shi...haha

[crimeis]

well, oh shit. i'm completely and utterly amazed! ♥ yoochun's got an imaginary friend, that's what i like to think. :DDD

[coconutjack]

hello dear! long time no see~! ^^
well, we'll see if the boy really is imaginary or not. XD
thanks for the lovely comments! :D

[mickey8]

it is....omfg! it's creepy!~

no doubt there is a ghost in this story!!!! *runs in circle*

i don't know if this has a co-relation with the Kim JaeJoong (now, YunHo's lover/boyfriend) but their (somewhat together) appearances are making things difficult to gauge.

god! and i thought that things are getting easier (between YunJae, at least)..now comes the creepy-yoochun-buggin dead KJJ. damn, i'm scared shitless reading that last few lines. it's not much but i can't handle imagining beautiful kid, KJJ being all watery and creepy (and to top that..it's midnight now =.=)!!~

*ahem*

back to a steadier self... i would like to say.. the YunJae interaction here, is really sweet..and almost innocent (though i feel the same creepiness YunHo felt at the very beginning..the playground..eekk!). except the fact that both are moving into that direction a lil too quickly (what, few bumping-into-each other, a tea and one night of walking around..there you have YunJae making out at the playground's bench)..the rest are relatively gorgeous. the

[coconutjack]

that only means that iv'e finally succeeded in making it supernatural! *throws confetti and blows horns*

*ahem*

creepy-yoochun-buggin dead KJJ >> thank you for making my day. ^^ rofl.

but seriously, thank you for the lovely comments. ^^ i admit i'm a bit awkward in writing yunjae. mian, i'm a noob at this. proabbly why they got into it too quickly. haha. but people are like that now, yes? ^^ they move faaaaast.

anyway i won't say too much since i don't want to give anything away. ^^ thank you and stay tuned~!

[mickey8]

eeek..supernatural is good (only not read when you're alone at home and when it's midnight). i was having this creepy-imaginary following me to sleep last nite. =.=

why so happy with that statement? tsk... IT IS CREEPY! yghnjmaoeuroagnvk!~

no. no. no.!~ it's not awkward.. you're writing them well..and i like the personalities you've tagged them with. it's very relevant and well... i love it! and you're new writers? heh! you win so much already!~ but yes, people nowadays seems to be moving fast i know..(>.<) anyhow..maybe it's the YunJae-bias mind working..wanting to see more cheesy-romantic courtship scenes.. that's why..^^

u don't need to give hints or say more... all you need to do is update quickly.. moarrr! ^^

~~♥

[_happy_as_rain_]

I just found your LJ recently and love your stories. I especially love the pacing of this story; I usually don't read suspense or supernatural stories at all, but this one has such an intriguing premise (Yoochun as a kid!) and mixes both the sensual & suspenseful (in this chapter, at least). I really love this. :)

[coconutjack]

ah thank you~! i'm quite new at this actually, so i really appreciate your comments! ^^ i actually don't write supernatural probably as much as you don't read them (because they're so hard to write! haha, i just realized it with this one). thanks for finding this one worthy of your attention! and yoochun makes a cute kid, haha. i just HAD to make him one. XD

[pokogo]

woahhhh didn't see the ghost thing coming, tingle in my spine~
oh oh! yunho and jae are getting it on ehhh~

So, jae here and jae from yunho's childhood are different, and he really is dead... i understand now. i was thinking that kid!jae somehow got rescued from the river and is the jae now.

i likey!~ very good!

[coconutjack]

hehehe. i'm trying to come up with the next chappie asap. thanks for reading! ^^

kid!jae is starting to creep me out actually. hahaha