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Spinning Webs Too Big To Climb (1/1)

Apr 09, 2011 05:11

Title: Spinning Webs Too Big To Climb
Genre: Television
Series: Community
Characters: Annie Edison, Jeff Winger, several OCs
Spoilers: 2x13- “Celebrity Pharmacology”
Rating: PG-13
Summary: It was a time in her life where no one was who they seemed, including her.
Author's Note: I've been working on this on and off for months, pretty much since ( Read more... )

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Comments 25

lunar47 April 9 2011, 12:47:39 UTC

OMG O_O Best fic I've read in ages. I don't really have anything else constructive to say lol.

cold_queen_5 April 9 2011, 13:16:47 UTC

Thank you! I worked ridiculously hard on this, so I'm happy that you enjoyed it!

cheapmemories April 9 2011, 14:04:14 UTC

Wow! This is awesome! I really like the Jeff rant about "waiting" :) Great job!

cold_queen_5 April 9 2011, 20:06:33 UTC

Thanks!

supercapo April 9 2011, 15:42:33 UTC

Okay wow. This is seriously one of the best fics I've read in a long time. I mean there are layers upon layers of awesome here. Spot on characterization, realistic character drama, fun little insights. Some fics are like fun little desserts. They're short, sweet and forgotten. This was a three course meal.

And Rich as the dealer I can't say I didn't see it coming(the line about Annie not speaking to him anymore made him the best candidate) but seeming how I hate Rich I loved it. Also it makes sense since he would have access to drugs and be able to enroll in all three colleges.

I can only really think of one flaw in the entire story. During Jeff's "waiting" speech. The comment about not having it mentioned in the men's room. I have to call shenannigans on that one. Men's rooms are places bereft of conversation. It goes against our "Guy Code".

But this is hardly an actual flaw. It serves the story very well actually.

Thank you for sharing this and I look forward to anything else you have to write.

cold_queen_5 April 9 2011, 20:07:59 UTC

Thank you for taking the time to write me such an awesome comment! I really appreciate you telling me your full thoughts because it does help me in my writing process. (For instance, I will totally take in to account that there is no talking in men's restrooms. I had no idea. I've never even been in one.) :)

shopgirl909 April 9 2011, 20:27:41 UTC

WOW. This was awesome. I enjoyed every moment of it.

Oh, but I am confused about one part...you had Jeff say, "Officer Lucas Tyler as in...your boyfriend Luke." But you never have Annie mention that he is an officer or what his full name is....how did Jeff know?

cold_queen_5 April 10 2011, 01:53:07 UTC

That's a really good question, LOL. I would say leap of logic? He knows she's hiding something, knows Luke has something to do with it, and with Annie's confession of being involved with the police he makes an assumption?

Or we could call it a plothole, which it totally is.

Thanks for taking the time to comment, though! I do appreciate it.

rozicanuti April 9 2011, 20:50:51 UTC

this was just WOW. Perfect. So deep. Amazing.

"The drugs endangered her body, the lying her mind, but Jeff was dangerous to her heart, and it'd already been bruised by him before."

This line was just beautiful.

cold_queen_5 April 10 2011, 01:53:58 UTC

Thanks! (Also, that is my favorite line as well.)