Comments | corellianjedi: weird, usa fic: yardstick family

corellianjedi

weird, usa fic: yardstick family

Feb 08, 2013 23:01

Title: Yardstick Family
Words: 7,305
Disclaimer: Not mine. Just borrowing. zombres gave me permission.
Summary: A collection of ficlet snapshots of the Hawthone family. A companion to Strong Man.
Note: Angie wanted more. I felt compelled to oblige. ;) It occured to me after I'd finished that I left out a somewhat pertinent detail that I had told Angie ( Read more... )

fic: weird usa, fic

Comments 7

zombres February 10 2013, 04:51:50 UTC

Okay, the fact that Ben and Liv obviously TALK about everything in their lives -- YES YES YES. Discussing the adoption, and their fears of not being ready to be parents. All of it.

The entire snippet with Charlie holding the newborn Scout DOES THINGS TO MY HEART. It just rings with truth and her reaction is so legitimately CHARLIE. "How not to swear in front of newborns", omfg I just love it.

AMARI WRITING DANNY ON ROBBIE'S HAND: I CRIED. I CRIED SO HARD. And the fact that Amari will almost know Danny, just because of Robbie's memories, ACH MAH HEART.

Amari sleeping in Scout's room -- their bond from day one. How Scout translates for him and defends him, even though he's her big brother, aaaagh. Someone hold my bag, I gotta throw myself on the floor repeatedly.

Ben's scars, Amari's nightmare, Olivia is "Daddy's hero", the entire family cuddling in bed. ;_____;

Charlie knocks twice then bursts through the front door.
"WHERE ARE MY TINY HUMANS?" she shouts.Dear Reader/Author: I screamed in delight ( ... )

corellianjedi February 11 2013, 02:01:26 UTC

(THANK YOU FOR LEAVING A LONG COMMENT, LONG COMMENTS MAKE MY LIIIIFE.)

Um, yeah, one of the things I super loved that you established with their relationship is that they actually talk about stuff. THEY COMMUNICATE SO WELL. Hooray.

"WHERE ARE MY TINY HUMANS?" was the line I hinted at earlier. I'm proud of it, ngl.

lol, it didn't occur to me until your comment that the old costumes to which I refer... are actually from the first Weird, USA fic I ever wrote you. I totally forgot they weren't canon.

I'm really, super happy you liked this. I wasn't sure; I felt pretty good about Strong Man, but I wasn't sure about this one so I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D

allthelivesofme February 12 2013, 19:09:53 UTC

"Hi," Charlie breathes. She blinks a few times at the tiny pale child at her arms and then looks up at Ben, wide-eyed. "Oh my God, what did you two do?"

"What?"

"You have a kid."

"Two, once the adoption is finalized."

"Oh my God, my brother has kids. My best friend has kids."

A sly grin streaks across Ben's face: "You're panicking a little right now, aren't you?"

"More than a little, you asshole. I am holding your kid."

"Charlie, don't wake--"

"Who decided we were old enough for this?"

MY HEART

THIS IS PERFECT AND SO VERYVERY CHARLIE

I MAY CRY

D-a-n-n-y.

Robbie swallows the curse that rises to his lips when Amari looks up at him. "Y-you want a Danny story?" Amari nods. "Did your mum and dad tell you about Danny?" Amari shakes his head, then pokes Robbie in the chest. "Oh, you saw him, did you?"

WPO4ERIUAWFJSALFJAPOIEWRUPOALFKJSALVAOPWERI

ALL OF THIS IS JUST SO LOVELY

corellianjedi February 12 2013, 22:11:18 UTC

Thank you! :D I'm very happy you liked it!

stillxmyxheart February 12 2013, 19:41:38 UTC

This is incredible, and I actually forgot until I finished it that Angie didn't write this, that's how true to the story and the characters this is. I adored Charlie's anxiety holding Scout the first time, Scout calling Robbie Uncle Pooh Bear, everything with Amari, just all of this is so amazing.

corellianjedi February 12 2013, 22:10:57 UTC

I actually forgot until I finished it that Angie didn't write this

Oh, wow, I'm not sure there's a compliment higher than that. Thank you for reading; I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

professor_spork March 2 2013, 08:04:32 UTC

"Is this... the good kind of crying now?" Olivia laughs into his shoulder, still a little watery, but miles better than she was ten minutes ago.

these two I cannot

"Oh fuck." She claps a hand over her mouth. "Sorry. Sorrysorrysorry, oh shit , no--" She sighs. "Oh kiddo, don't ever listen to me, okay?"

bless

"Oh my God, what did you two do?"
"What?"
"You have a kid."
"Two, once the adoption is finalized."
"Oh my God, my brother has kids. My best friend has kids."
A sly grin streaks across Ben's face: "You're panicking a little right now, aren't you?"
"More than a little, you asshole. I am holding your kid."

dying brb lolling forever

"Sit down before you drop my daughter."
"Why am I holding your kid?"

seriously this is my favorite

"Oh, whoa, I'm sorry, I don't sign. I haven't learned. Yet! But I will."

<3333333333

"Can you write?" he asks, pulling a pen from his pocket. He can't find any paper, so he offers Amari the back of his hand ( ... )