Scattered Vertebrae (II)

[countingcr0ws]

Title: Scattered Vertebrae
Author: countingcr0ws
Pairing/ Characters: Yunjae
Rating: PG
Form: One-shot, Sequel ( 1 | 2 )
Genre: AU, Generally Happy, Lucid, Slice of Life
Summary: Jaejoong finds himself walking on a thin line, wondering if having nothing, or nothing, is better.

Comments

[songbird52317]

I really enjoyed this. I loved the misdirection you used. I was so sad for Yunho and his desperate love for Jaejoong. I pictured him as just some cubicle worker. Ha, ha! And then to discover in Part 2 that Jae is just as desperately in love with him and that he's the head of some company. So sweet. I didn't mind at all the repetition. I loved the interplay between the colognes and both so terribly afraid of losing the other.

Now what I really want is one more chapter. I want to hear that conversation continue - when they come clean with each other, express their love and laugh and cry over their fears, share their hopes and dreams, etc.

Thanks for writing this sweet, angsty story.

[countingcr0ws]

Omg. Stap. Stap it. Omg. So I read your comment yesterday and I was like manz that is hard, I don't think I can, bla bla and I was rereading it today like the both parts, and I could see the sequel? Like omg. Why. /crawls to clutch at your hem. HAHAHA. CREEPASS. HAHAHA. But honestly you've succeeded in putting it in my mind and I guess its easier to do that because this world is pretty much set up and I'll admit that there's potential for that to happen. :( I was initially like so done with it. Like maybe because it sounds so angsty or smth. Which is why nobody seems to like it, haha. Idk. But yeah. So I was like rewatching inception a little while back and Cobb said that like an idea was the most addictive thing or smth of that sort. Or was it the hardest to look away from and yeah. You don't know the gravity of it when I say that you've succeeded in putting the idea of it in my mind. Its really gonna happen and you better read it. OMG. HAHAHAHA. WHAT. OMG. I APOLOGIZE FOR MY FINGERS. OMG. THAT WAS SO RUDE. OMG. /NOOOOOOOOOZ. haha.

[songbird52317]

Oh my, I'm so excited my comment has inspired you to write more! I'll be watching for it.

I think when I read 'paper pusher' an image of him entered my brain and wouldn't let go. It certainly seemed to fit the way he thought about himself in relation to Jae. So when you mentioned the newspaper articles I still assumed he was just one of the individuals on a project team. LOL.

Regarding angst - you're right, this doesn't have the claw in the heart where I've suddenly broken out into tears, but it does have a sense of incipient loss to it, with both of them believing the other doesn't really care for them except for the physical relationship. And somehow in this encounter they're able to hear each other through their touches. Because Yunho never actually says his "I love you" out loud, right? It's a lovely story.

[countingcr0ws]

Yeah! I guess that there's this rolling undercurrent of sadness that keeps you on the edge, haha.
And I actually have like a lot of plots but I never have the time to really write them. /crouches. And finals are approachingggg. I swear that that's a total mess of a marathon. Haha. I'm actually excited though. /heh.

[ligerliger]

hxdysjjxxissswiajdxjic I LOVED IT the entire time I read it, I kept feeling like I'd read the same story already which is good because that means you kept the atmosphere the same :D oh my gosh, I loved looking into their minds and reading about their worries and insecurities from both ends... I think you characterized them both really well, and then the ending is just beauty ♥️ (btw, perfect mechanics; unless I got distracted by how much I loved this lol) sfddffjblczvvdfhvh I was going to say that I like this one more but I think they both had really relatable qualities and you only get one perspective on each side~ so good \o/
I will never get tired of how your fics are so psychological and introspective; they are endlessly intriguing!

[countingcr0ws]

/ducks because of endless compliments. I guess I'm still super concerned about the part about repetition and I really wanted to make it not feel like you're reading the same thing again but I'm not sure to what extent of differentiation is possible and I actually spotted a few mistakes and that is a concern but I swear that the draft I sent you was like ten times worse like I was literally cringing like one line into it and I was like omgosh, no. Anyway, omg. Haha. I just scrolled up for things to reply to, but I don't know how because I'm terrible with compliments, haha. And I actually kinda prefer this one more too because I had to mess the first one up and it reads funny now, idk. Haha. This is dumbed down and easy to read. Hahahaha. And omg. Introspective. Are you serious! Have you read my shoujo one shot about boyfriends, omg haha. But. I'll take it and you don't get it when I say that I'm thankful that you liked it, haha. You're like the max standard, and I swear that like If you hate something even, throw it at me and I'll

[ligerliger]

Claudia you are too sweet ;~; /clings/ I really liked it!!! & the repetition was fine for me at least--it served as a reminder of the scene but enough so that I would understand the perspective of the other person involved. it was awesome!

[shinchul303]

Just read both of these and was totally caught up. I have always loved multiple perspective stories.

I am with SongBird and would welcome a wrapup third chapter where they make peace. There's so much cumulative tension in both it would be a release to see them finally free and open with each other.

Could be as beautiful as all those ancient youtube moments between them in "real life".

[countingcr0ws]

I swear that I'm never good with sequels. But after rereading it (because I'm so full and in the verge of a food coma) with the comment to continue the verse, I actually could see something going on, and I think that you're gonna get it, haha. Anyway, its definitely going to be much lighter instead of them sounding like their tiptoeing on the ledges of buildings and careful to push each other too much. Omg. I'm actually getting more excited now like can you imagine???? Omg. It'll be like a completely new relationship where they rediscover each other

[happy_girl89]

3 months is never late for me dear :D i post mine like half a year or so XD

Yunjae and their insecurities. even though words are overrated, they should tell their feelings. verbally d:

and so how was Thailand? :D (December)

[countingcr0ws]

OMG. THEY'D TOTALLY DO THAT IN THE SEQUEL. /I CAN SEE IT HAPPENING. HAHAHA. (Oh yeah. Update. That's totally gonna happen

[happy_girl89]

omg i will wait for that sequel :DD

gah! transexuals in Thailang are <3333333
they are pretty. i remember Jaejae thought that there are so many pretty Thai girls.. until he knew. BUT THEY ARE SO PRETTY AND YES THEY WILL MAKE ANYONE ENVY ); (((;

metal detectors.. it gives me airport feels XD
yes. SAAAAAAALLLLLLLEEEEE. up to how %? i bet you wasted stacks of money on clothes d: aw. how would you know if it's fit for you if you can't try? ): well, that's business i guess .__.
LOL the clothes are fit either for a very cold winter or so hot summer XD
well, in Fashion industry, Korea ranks higher than Thai (thou JAPAN ROCKS THE MOST)

i was thinking of taking a trip (because i have a long vacation. 5 months. D:) but i guess it's never too early to prepare for heavy university life (i'm officially a college girl omg ;~; XD)

[countingcr0ws]

Haha. The sales are more of like 1000 baht rack. Haha. Same with Korea. Haha. Like 5000 won rack. Haha. And then you just keep rifling through. Haha. But seriously though. The Korean clothes are all similar. Like because they get all their stocks from dongdaemun. Haha. AND YES. TAKE A FREAKING TRIP. GET A JOB FIRST. EARN SOME MOOLAH. PLAN A TRIP TO SPEND THE MOOLAH. HAHAA. That's what I did. I had like a nine months break before university and that's what I did. Work my ass off. Then plan a budget trip, haha. But tbh because I thought you were an '89, you'd be in college already. Haha. And yeah! I guess Korea is good but go during summer (summer in Korea is heck rainy though, ugh. We went to the han river parks but it was all muddy and lame and umbrellas were ridiculously expensive like seriously

[hyunnyb]

I'm so happy I got to read both parts at the same time, I didn't feel like it was repetition just continuity. The common thread between them of being totally entranced by the other and yet too insecure to believe their own worth was really interesting. Sorry, nothing to rant about here, this was just a lovely story and I'm glad you finished it.

[countingcr0ws]

Haha I actually really get the rant part like half the time after reading something I really don't know what to comment about. And whatever I type ends up so much lamer than others, and idk. haha. Like I talk about coherency and things like that. Which is just weird. But whelp. Thank you. Omg. And that is it! Like that's what I really wanted to say. Like they're so into each other, and they keep thinking that they're not enough to be part of the other. And it keeps getting worse and worse. And you can't imagine how thankful I am that you said that it wasn't repetitive. Like that was one of my greatest concerns, and I tried my best to not make it too similar like I've read some perspective offerings that are literally the same story and I wanted to avoid that. And thank you, really :( and your dp just reminded me to be excited about Jaejoong's new drama, hahaha.