[fic] Forward the Machine (AT, Action/Adventure) - Chapter 7 - Part Two

[cryogenia]

Title: Forward the Machine - Chapter 07
Genre: Action/adventure, AT (diverging from mid-CoS)
Rating: R
Summary: (AT diverging from mid-movie): What if the Thule Society hadn’t opened the Gate on that fateful November 8th? What if Alfons Heiderich had yet to fire his rocket? What if Alphonse Elric was still out there searching? And what if Edward

Comments

[sky_dark]

*chews nails*

you are an evil, evil woman, but you are also amazing. The concept of Alfons as alchemist is brilliant.

more please.

[cryogenia]

I am glad you like little alchemist Alfons XD (He's not very good at it though XD)

[militsa]

[cryogenia]

Yeah...the whole point of this fic for me is to take some of those random things the movie threw out at us, and attempt to make them make sense XD; And yeah, poor little Al...his core personality is that he wants to be friendly and liked, he tries to see the other person's point of view still. He's just messed up XD

[semipertinent]

Ooh, I know my biblical references, and the 'we are legion' part gave me the creeps.

Al is going to be distraught, but who can he tell? One of the things I like best about this story is that Al is becoming more like Ed; he is isolated from the people around him by the secrets he must keep about this other world. A place where alchemy didn't exist? Madness.

[cryogenia]

It's always such a pleasure to get a review from you - you're such an observant reader XD You pick up on each and every little detail I throw in there :D

[semipertinent]

*hides scalpel* :D

It's always such a pleasure to get fic from you, it's always got so much substance. I can rip it apart and wallow in it. <3

[ankoku_tenshi]

I love the details; it really makes the story come alive. I could be wrong, but did Alphonse come in contact with the Gate? That bit was terrifying, really, it was so intense, that feeling of overwhelming. Beautiful!

[cryogenia]

Yes - you are right, Al just had a brush with the Gate right there. Looks like Armstrong's fears about side effects might be correct...

[cairaguas]

The nightmare soul transfer spooked me something bad. Good job. It was terrifying and, because I knew it was only written word to me, delightful.

And then Alphonse met Alfonse again, and that spooked me out a second time, because I wondered about the location of Alphonse's soul, and I worried.

"This is not a well man" is an interesting phrase. I love the phrasing in this story.

Oh, you're strict with your readers, to end on an uncertainty like that. Al waking up? Being woken up? Going back to the light and being stuck there? I'll wait for the next chapter impatiently. Continue~ Continue~

[cryogenia]

Thank you for your lovely comments! I always look forward to your insights. :) I am glad the Gate creeped you out. I see it as very Other :)