Part Thirteen

[datsun99]

Sorry for the delay guys; I felt a short update now might be better than a long one after another week, so I wrote half the chapter I planned out this evening, et voila. I hope you enjoy it; let me know. I've never really written a scene like this before, so I'd appreciate any crit or feedback.

House was far too close, scrutinising him, reaching out

Comments

[bmax67]

Loved all the little details in explaining the scene like Wilson grabbing the counter, House and Wilson's expressions.

Liked this line: He shifted awkwardly, covering his guilt by scowling at the counter in annoyance.
Totally Houselike.
I thought you did a great job. There's all that tension and anger coming from Wilson and it seemed House was actually trying to be the calm one for a change until he stormed out.

[datsun99]

Thanks very much :) Am glad House was sufficiently House-like! Will be updating soon

[spoggly]

Ouch. That was awesome, but it hurt to read!

[datsun99]

It kind of hurt to write as well! Now I have to try and fix it, hmm . . Thanks for commenting :)

[brandy71]

I was so excited to see an update - and you didn't disappoint! Cuddy needs to tell Wilson that she forced House to take the case...

[datsun99]

Cuddy will be appearing in the next chapter actually :) thanks for commenting!

[evila_elf]

I kept repeating 'shit' over and over as I was reading this. Ack!! I hate the helpless-bystander feeling!!!

Nice update, but ahhhhhh!!!!
*further frustrated sounds*

[datsun99]

haha, sorry about that! Glad you are enjoying the story; will be updating soon and trying to do some damage control >:)

[alemyrddin]

Yay for the update, but ouch. That hurt. And for once, it wasn't House's fault.
I hope they sort it out soon.

[datsun99]

I'm not really sure who's fault any of this is actually! :/ sorting out will be tricky! Thanks very much for commenting, will update soon