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dearygirl

guess what we'll discover (3/11)

Sep 15, 2011 14:42

Pairing: Jeff/Annie
Spoilers: Only for the 3x01 episode title
Word Count: 4998
Rating: PG-13, for language
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Description: Jeff gets a new roommate.
Author's Note: I love everyone in this bar. Especially 0penhearts for beta'ing this monstrosity.

( Have you ever spent an entire day just doing nothing? )

community, guess what we'll discover, fanfiction, jeff/annie

Comments 38

thebadunkadunk September 16 2011, 09:40:35 UTC

Loved this! Can't wait for the next part

dearygirl October 2 2011, 03:42:18 UTC

Thank you! It won't be too much longer until the next installment!

all_you_wanted September 16 2011, 14:53:08 UTC

Only thing that could've made it better would've been skinny dipping. ;) :D

dearygirl October 2 2011, 03:43:53 UTC

Haha! In my very first draft of this they did actually strip down to their underwear and swim... maybe I'll compile a post of outtakes once I'm done with this whole thing. :)

jennynoname September 16 2011, 15:25:25 UTC

HAPPY FRIDAY TO ME. I love seeing updates to this story. :) Ready for a comment of epic proportions? No? Too bad!

This? Annie, though, is always busy and always moving, like she has to fill in all those extra hours between sleeping and working. She hangs out with Abed and has lunch with Britta and baby-sits Shirley’s kids and actually goes and volunteers building houses and feeding the homeless and working at a local day camp on the weekends when the most Jeff ever accomplishes is beating his high score on Call of Duty. This is so totally Annie that I immediately believe that it's canon. No, seriously guys - this is what Annie Edison did between the gap between season 2 and 3. ;)

“I think you think you just insulted me, but… I can’t be insulted. I’m too relaxed.” He slouches further into the couch with a breezy grin and Annie narrows her eyes at him as she stands up ( ... )

dearygirl October 2 2011, 04:30:16 UTC

Your comments are the greatest!!!

THIS. Guh. Love. *explodes into little confetti hearts*

Okay, true story: this moment on the couch where it's just suddenly *BAM* sexual tension? Was not supposed to happen. But I SWEAR when these two are together it's just impossible for there not to be that spark of something undeniable.

Seriously, thank you! I love specific comments because they really tell me what's working. And the next chapter will be posted soon. I got too caught up in haze of excitement with the show being back but I'm back to writing now!

wallows September 16 2011, 17:24:23 UTC

Let me count the ways I adore this fic and the times I mean to read it again. Two, two, two, two, too many, Four!(More!!)
Each new chapter is more awesome than the one before it. You set them up so well, they're being all friendly, then boom! An errant glance sends me squeeing all over the place.

I’m going to relax harder than anyone’s ever relaxed before.”

“Those words are pretty meaningless when I know you don’t mean them.” Jeff reaches over and flicks at her ponytail. so cute. It's like they're in 5th grade. You are also able to make clear distinctions between his interactions with Annie and with Britta, even if they both involve teasing on Jeff's part.

Jeff nods, not sure if he should feel smug or guilty. Or even terrified at the idea that some guy, some day, was going to come first

“Maybe we should get married.”
hahaha you're timing is perfect!!!!
Omigod that visual of them together by the poolawwww...so beautiful I could cry...

dearygirl October 2 2011, 04:12:04 UTC

HA! You win at life for the "Two, two, two, two, too many, FOUR!" reference. (It is ridiculous how quickly that gets stuck in my head).

You are also able to make clear distinctions between his interactions with Annie and with Britta, even if they both involve teasing on Jeff's part.

Yay! I really try to make this subtlety different so I'm glad it works.

teruel_a_witch September 16 2011, 23:33:51 UTC

OMG I've got just HUGEST silliest grin on my face, you totally do envelope my brain in a fog of preciousness (I'm totally gonna use hat from now on when talking about J/A and your fic, jsyk, and srsly, the only feeling I can compare it to is how Ten and Rose circa s2 made me feel like, just warm and fuzzy and content) with your writing, and they are just so.perfectly. Jeff and Annie, even more than the show Jeff and Annie sometimes are (well, your fanfic has always been better written than canon could ever be so I shouldn't be surprised)
I just love how they enjoy each other, and their hanging out feels so natural and effortless and everything just flows. And the fact that they are having so.much.fun together is just heart-warming.

He imagines moving over to her, pulling her down to the floor and showing her all the much more interesting things they could do to make her even hotter.
*gulps* now I'm hot too ;)

I also like the fact that Jeff brought her to a bar where he usually hangs out alone (and they can be alone together), I ( ... )

teruel_a_witch September 16 2011, 23:36:51 UTC

I'm totally gonna use hat
*use THAT, ugh, sorry for the typo and a somewhat jumbled comment, it's after 3am and it's been a long week, this update totally has been the best end-of-the-work week reward, thank youuu <3

dearygirl October 2 2011, 04:19:18 UTC

Such a nice comment, thank you!

I also like the fact that Jeff brought her to a bar where he usually hangs out alone (and they can be alone together), I wonder if he realises implications of that, in a way, it's like he shared something with her that he hadn't with other women before. Like he keeps letting her in further in further into his life

I'm glad you picked up on that! I originally had Annie commenting on it but then decided to leave it a little more subtle.

Hee @bartender calling her Milady, did Jeff pick that up there? Yup! Again, in the first draft he actually got really annoyed about it and Annie started teasing him ( ... )