Fic: Onstermay

[debbiel66]

Title: Onstermay
Author: debbiel66
Characters: John, Dean, Sam, Bobby
Word Count: 7600
Genre: gen
Rating: R (language)
Warnings: Spoilers through 6X16; AU from that point on
Author's Notes: This story follows Clean Slate, Killing Time, and Backseat Driver in my resurrected!John verse. It is not necessary to read those stories first, but it would

Comments

[nickitynackity]

What a great verse. I love John back with the boys, and especially love that Dean isn't all that accepting this time round. Really well written!

[debbiel66]

Thank you so much - I'm so thrilled you enjoyed it! &hearts

[digitalwave]

Sweetie,

this was so wonderful to see today. Like I told you last time this 'verse is my happy place and I was overjoyed to see you'd gone back to visit it again.

If we're really lucky maybe they'll talk to you again sometime. Regardless, it was, as always, amazing. I love how spot on all of their voices always are. :)

*hugs*

[debbiel66]

Originally, when I was planning out my big bang (which this was originally supposed to be), this was how it ended. I am so glad this is your happy place though - that means a lot! And it means a lot that it made me happy.

Thank you so much for letting me know they're voices worked for you. I watched about half a dozen eps to get back into show!speak, lol.

I really appreciate your encouragement!

[saberivojo]

Awesome. I love that Dean is protective of Sam but he is starting to let John in - even if it is in tiny increments. I think one of the things that I like so much is that John realizes what a dead-beat dad he has been in the past. Like here:

He has always been given so much more than he deserves

He doesn't make excuses for it, simply acknowledges it and moves on. That is very much how I see John.

Can I tell you how funny it is that Dean is walking around butt-naked in the hotel room? Then tormenting Sam about it.

“Dude, seriously get dressed,” Sam says, but Dean ignores him. “I have to sleep in that bed too.”

Naked Dean is also kinda hot. Sorry - it can't be helped.

BTW? I think you missed a word here - It has been a long time since he heard Dean something like that.

The changes you made while subtle are perfect. Great job.

[debbiel66]

Hee, I was worried you'd think Dean was being disrespectful, like we talked about...and he kind of was, but there was softening there as well.

I liked the 'butt-naked' scene as well, and Sam's wounded sensibilities about the bedspread, which was most likely unthinkable as well. In RL, I am surrounded by males all the time, and I honestly think they'd walk around naked all the time to save the laundry if they had to do it themselves. And there's the visual with dripping Dean...yeah. Works for me too. :)

Thank you so much for your encouragement and cheerleading! I really do appreciate it.

(and for the typo! Fixed!)

[saberivojo]

Okay. So I know that I have the disrespectful thing going on but kids are never automatons and Lord knows Dean can dish it out with the best of them.

My poor son never wanted anybody to see his naked butt but he had a little sister so it is not quite the same thing. In fact, he stuck wet wadded up toilet paper in the large keyholes we have in our bathroom door so that no one could sneak a peak.

That could have been for a multitude of reasons though. *grins* BTW, the tissue is still there and he will be 25 next week.

[debbiel66]

I wondered what you'd think about that. Dean is definitely not an automaton!

And to clarify, I think most boys, when they get older, lose the naked thing. When they were little though... that was a different story. :) And Sam was NOT pleased...

[embroiderama]

So glad to see more of this! I love the mystery of how Sam killed the monster and how it was resolved. And then the whole undercurrent of Adam and Kate and the ghouls--I look forward to seeing how that all gets revealed.

[debbiel66]

Yay, I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you for your encouragement. It will be interesting if I keep going with this, given that season 7 looks to be so dramatically different.

[embroiderama]

Meh, you don't need to worry about S7--just say that your 'verse goes AU after episode whatever.

[debbiel66]

So you don't think it's necessary to continue along a parallel storyline?

I've never tried anything longterm like this on a show with open canon, and I'm just not terribly clever about such things.

I was just thinking with god!Cas and all, readers/viewers would have moved on.

[callistosh65]

Wonderful installment, my friend. That entire last paragraph is a thing of great joy. I love the dynamic you write, it was such a neat idea to take John into S6.

In particular, the reflections on Adam from John, and then the reaction of Sam and Dean to his name.. very poignant and bittersweet.

[debbiel66]

Thank you SO much for your help with this. Can't tell you how much I appreciate it. The ending was my favorite part to write, so I'm glad that worked for you as well. :)