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Apr 21, 2010 23:14

Title: Backseat
Author: desfinado
Pairing: Gerard/Mikey/Frank
Rating: R
Word count: 1564
Disclaimer: They don’t belong to me; not making a profit.
Summary: Mikey spends most of twelfth grade watching Jersey from backseat windows.

( Backseat )

#914, bandom, fic

Comments 42

lemon_murder April 22 2010, 21:23:24 UTC

This was so sweet, and it just flowed really well.
I enjoyed it!

desfinado April 23 2010, 03:16:49 UTC

Thank you so much, I'm happy you felt that way! :)

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desfinado April 24 2010, 03:49:35 UTC

Thanks, I'm so glad!

suchaprettydoll April 23 2010, 12:34:20 UTC

You make everything so real and believable. I believed every word of this. Come live in my apartment and write stories for me please? I promise chocolate

desfinado April 24 2010, 03:50:34 UTC

LOL chocolate, my one weakness! I could write fics like this FOREVER, and I am so happy you felt it was believable! Thank you so so much :D

rosykate April 24 2010, 04:53:25 UTC

This was amazingly vivid and I really loved the atmosphere you created. I think that the description was worked in really well to Mikey's narrator voice.

desfinado April 24 2010, 05:31:41 UTC

Thank you for such constructive feedback! So glad the atmosphere and descriptions worked for you and still felt appropriate for Mikey. :D

demolition_lexi April 25 2010, 05:53:39 UTC

OH my god! This is beautiful in soooo many ways. I just love the vibe of this story- you really captured that true Jersey industrial feel and it's just great and it's so ~them. Like... I can totally see it and how everybody's just like, yeah... this is a typical day. And it IS so typical so it's just.. gah! Perfect.

I love that you can feel the cold and the heat and the cassettes, you can taste the coffee and cigarettes and and smell the dred wax. I can even hear the faint hum of the crappy mall lighting. You are just amazing...

Oh yeah and then there's the fact that oh my GOD that scene was hot. Like oh god Waycest Grinding? -is dead- wi0ath[4589tu. :) Well done my love...

WELL DONE <3

desfinado May 2 2010, 05:26:10 UTC

Thank you SO so much for such thoughtful and constructive feedback! I'm so happy to have captured the feeling of the city and how it looks and feels through Mikey's eyes as a teenager there, I love telling stories as if it's just a normal day, but you see the things that make it kind of amazing at the same time.

So glad you enjoyed the (sort of) sex too. Waycest grinding, always A+ in my books :D Thanks again!