Part 3

[detachment_guy]

I want so badly to believe that "there is truth, that love is real"
And I want life in every word to the extent that it's absurd.

Oz/Andrew slash, post-ftvs
Oz and Andrew belong to Monseuir Whedon
Lyrics by the Postal Service's Clark Gable

Comments

[cockney]

Teh awesome. I usually don't read fic, but I make an exception for this. <3.

And Kate really is on crack. I couldn't write this shit, even if I wanted to.

[sodapopprincess]

Dude, you could totes write Andrew. You are great at conveying chracters and emotions in your role-playing stuff, this is only a little different. I have never written a fic before this series. I didn't really understand why people did it. I am really enjoying getting into both of their heads. Role playing is harder and easier. You don't know what the other person's version of the character is going to do, you then must figure out how your character would react. In the fic stuff that I am doing, it is trying to figure out how both parties would react, get inside both of their heads and into their voices simultaneously. Okay, I am just rambling now.

I appreciate you reding!

[bitter_brother]

Well, you ALMOST got to the sex! haha. But, YAY! Progress! And Andrew finally owns up to it: that he wants it and needs it. Which, hey ya, does he ever.

The first bit, the flashback, is a *wee* bit confusing. As well as some of the POV stuff. It's a little hard to go back and forth, I think, between Oz's voice and Andrew's... even on a line to line basis. I found myself going back and re-reading a couple of parts because I got confused.

Also, missing a word here?: Imagining Warren's hands roughly on, a stolen kiss on a spaceship.

Loved: With Oz, his words were a foil for his silence.

Confused: Andrew had constantly and never thought of Oz in a sexual way. -- This might be an artistic way to express Andrew's ambivalence, and I might just be reading it too obtuse-ly.

Love it, Brandy. Keep writing. I WANT TO SEE THEM DO IT!

[sodapopprincess]

I know, I know about the progress part of things. Next time I promise sex and a finish. I feel like they have both have so much to say/do in their own heads and sex is just the testy side dish ;)

Hrm. I guess I like getting into both of their heads, but maybe it is not working. Perhaps the final one, I can write from each of their perpectives singly.

Thanks for the heads up on the missing word.

I want to see them do it too. At least Andrew's pants are finally off! Now I just need to get them to the doing it part!

[detachment_guy]

I said testy side dish! I meant tasty, but testy is so much better! Like testically.