ACCIDENTALLY PERFECT

[deusssexmachina]

This was written for the 3rd November challenge in the Brigits Flame community. The prompt was:

ACCIDENTALLY PERFECT

At two in the morning, lights were still up in the big hall in Chasewell mansion. A mixed company had gathered around the round table - a group of about ten men and women of ages fifteen to sixty. Most of them were showing clear

Comments

[pauljoy]

IT IS TIME TO GO, the voice reminded her gently, but firmly. I HAVE LET YOU LINGER FOR MUCH LONGER THAN WHAT THE RULES SAY.
This one line was so different from the others (the caps!), that it made me laugh out loud.

This piece suits the prompt perfectly. I pity Helen. This one line sums it all up:
Accidentally perfect, Helen thought for herself. Perfect in everything she never wanted, less than average in things where her passion lay.
Great job on this, I enjoyed reading it greatly :)

[deusssexmachina]

Weeeell... I was sort of trying to imply who was talking with the caps :D Without actually saying it...

[kayden_eidyak]

Well, it may sound irreverent, but I found the bickering over what to put in the obituary quite amusing. But I do feel bad for Helen also for not living the life she wanted. Very well done!

BTW, who's the chick on your wallpaper with the wild hair and uber-cool eyeliner thing going on?

[deusssexmachina]

Thats completely ok, it was not supposed to be entirely depressive :) more like ironic.

Eeeeh that´s actually not a girl, it´s a japanese guitarist called Mana xD

[kayden_eidyak]

Whoa, seriously? Okiedokie then. Still. I like the eyeliner. =P

[deusssexmachina]

Thank you! *hugs* I was glad to have passed into this week, because I really wanted to write it :) 3rd week challenges always the best :)

[cedarwolfsinger]

Oh, how immeasurably sad! To be watching your family as they write your obituary and realize that they had no idea who you really were and what your deepest desires had been. How sad for Helen.

[deusssexmachina]

Ironically, I wanted to write about myself at first, but this was better...

[katden]

Wonderful use of the prompt and a very sad, bitter sweet peek into the end of one life! There's some polishing to be done, but kudos on your simple yet descriptive way of highlighting poor Helen's years in a way that showed us just how accidental (and somewhat unfortunate) her life's successes were. Good job :D

[deusssexmachina]

Thanks... and yes I realize my English is a bit off :( I will have to wait for the editor because my limited skills do not find mistakes in it.