It had been inspired, Jafar had to admit, to bring the boy back from the Cave of Wonders with him. He was really a *charming* boy, so…independent, so…malleable. So adorably innocent, for all his former life on the streets. He really thought that if he begged prettily enough, Jafar would take the enchanted chain from his wrists and let him go. It was really quite cute
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The Colonel loves you, too, and continues to marvel at your consistently incredible writing! I simply marvel at the fact that you manage to keep these pieces short and succinct, yet packed with juicy details and always in-character.
Loved the cadence of the line starting with: ...dressed in nothing but what Jafar gave him... That sentence was quite artfully constructed, a highlight in a piece that was already full of great moments.
I think the succinctness comes from liking poetry, where you've only got so many words to work with, so you have to make all of them do double or triple duty.
Re: Jafar's Boyimaginary_goluxSeptember 26 2010, 14:08:41 UTC
Ooo. Please, feel free to write a sequel. I'm interested to know what Aladdin's thinking (other than, you know, 'I hate my life' or similar.) I'm deeply flattered.
He was expecting to be killed. Quickly, with the executioner's axe, or slowly, through starvation, disease, and neglect back in the dungeon. He should have realized what was coming when the cell he was put in was light and airy, overlooking the gardens, and the manacles the guards locked him into were attached to a bed. Should have, but didn't. He was too miserable too think, too trapped in his expectations, and he didn't know - he didn't know that things like this could happen
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Goodness. I'm not sure what I thought Aladdin would be thinking, but it wasn't that, and WOW but that's exactly what he *would* be thinking. This is magnificent.
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Hnngh.
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Loved the cadence of the line starting with: ...dressed in nothing but what Jafar gave him... That sentence was quite artfully constructed, a highlight in a piece that was already full of great moments.
Very well done, thanks so much for sharing!
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I think the succinctness comes from liking poetry, where you've only got so many words to work with, so you have to make all of them do double or triple duty.
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(I tried to post this comment before and it seems lj ate it. Apologies if you get it twice.)
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