Interlude?

[dlwhinery]

      What I wanted to accomplish today was at least getting a basic idea of what I wanted to do as far as the "Interlude" song of our CD. There has been a lot of input from every member of the band and a majority of the ideas would make the song less and interlude and more an individual song that has an "acoustic" feel (IE: Not every member of the

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[dryadia]

Is that what I said?
I don't know if I understood what you wanted as an interlude, I just thought it'd be neat to use an old song as the music. Maybe techno'd and up-beat, or slower depending.
It doesn't matter to me, I'm just reiterating my original idea as you asked me.

I digress, my original reason for this post is your lyrics.
They are quite confusing, how can someone be an inviting love and yet give your fears a nickname, ie: "Biggie Smalls" as sobriquet is intended. It then poses more confusing still when you mention a limbo of your own device.

Although I understand what these first two are going for. (I can't for the life of me get what sobriquet someone you love may come up with for your fears, Dan's Demons? lol) The part that get's me is when you bring up limbo. It's like you're forgetting everything you just wrote and going off on a completely separate tangent.
I'd say if you must keep the first or second line that you pull them together with the third, or vice versa.

[dlwhinery]

Limbo is being used as a metaphor for the in between, stand still, the waiting room...so what I meant, was that "Inviting Love" is a fancy nickname (sobriquet) for this fear of mine of standing still "steady through the years". Make sense?

granted, i'm using the term sobriquet loosely here, but I feel it works even better in a poetic sense for that reason, like a double meaning. Sobriquets are often thrown in place of other names for their familiarity and there's nothing more familiar or notorious than love.

I know you had a different idea, I just went with this one because I think a techno or electronic song would sound VERY out of place in our CD, so I decided to go with this instead, which will sound really good I think.

[tbass]

When you actually print the lyrics in the book, just make it like,

You were that "Inviting Love",
a sobriquet for my fears

and that fixes it.

[dlwhinery]

Yeah, I think it's the lack of punctuation in the lyrics that made it confusing...because it should read like this:

You were that inviting love (a sobriquet for my fears of a limbo of your devise)

but the fun of leaving punctuation out, is that it creates secrecy in the next line...as in do I mean:
You were that inviting love steady through the years.
or
A limbo of your devise steady through the years.

One is very positive while the other is very negative, which has an extra meaning because it really represents the pros and cons of human attraction. This is something nobody will ever notice, but still....

[tbass]

When I first read it, I thought the first two lines were kind of about being afraid to be in love, so it made sense.. but if it's not, then yeah.. I get what you're saying.

And by limbo, he could simply mean the dance/game where you shimmy under a stick and not the black hole that sucks Frankenstein away at the end of Monster Squad.

[dlwhinery]

not so much being afraid of being in love so much as the complications involved with any form of human contact...if that makes sense? The song is obviously greatly inspired by Romeo and Juliet given the title and subject matter.....and it wasn't that they were afraid of being in love so much as it was so forbidden, thus there was a constant sense of longing and fear wrapped with the feelings which was very bitter sweet. However, instead of describing all of that in acts and acts, we could just give it a fancy nickname familiar to all, a sobriquet if you will, and call it love. That's what I was going for.

Sobriquet is being used loosely, but I feel almost metaphorically and poetically.