The Cassandra Complex [PG-13] for ningloreth (3/3)

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Title: The Cassandra Complex
Author: plural_entity
Rating: PG-13
Recipient: ningloreth
Disclaimer: I am not the original author or creator of this universe, canon, or characters present. I make no claim to copyright, property, or profit.
Warnings: Some strong language.
Words: ~19k.

Summary: “Cassandra had been loved by Apollo, and he gave her the gift of prophecy; but

Comments

[cklls]

Intriguing concept and interesting story line. I enjoyed the twists and turns, and would have liked to see some of them fleshed out even further. A small handful of SPaG mistakes, all easily fixed. This story shows great potential, and I'd bet it could easily mushroom to a 50K+ word story. Nicely done, and it left me wanting more.

[mccargi]

Well, that was quite the adventure. This was sweet, fun, and a really interesting twist with the alternate dimension. I love that you manage to write D & Hr as grown ups, but still keep them true to character, they haven't been given radical personality transplants by aging, you saved that for their Other selves ;)

Brilliantly Done!

[rzzmg]

I agree with Cklls here: I would have loved a few more scenes in the middle between D & H to really illustrated the change of heart between them. Their romance seemed a little rushed.

I adored the way the Other Draco & Other Hermione had just a profound impact on our D & H. A powerful scene there.

I was glad to see your Hermione regain a lot of her former self in this chapter, and that you explained her previous weakness away with the simple line of her chin raising and the effect that had on her nerves.

Again, a few spelling issues, one tense issue. Easily revised.

The story feels complete the way you ended it, although you could write an Epilogue, if you were so inclined (letting us know about the company decisions, where D & H would go from here, what happens at Ginny's wedding, do they ever see Cassandra again?, what was going on between Blaise & Pansy and will that be resolved?, what is Lucius' ultimate fate and will he reconcile with Draco before then?). I'd most definitely be interested in reading that. :)

[somandalicious]

There isn't really anything I can add that hasn't already been said, but I too would like to see this fleshed out a bit and tweaked here and there. This story has MAJOR potential to be something new and fresh to the fandom. So please!!!! Do it!!

Good job, Author!

[artsyjeans]

Absolutely love this concept. I would love to see more. Great job!!