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gedry October 25 2010, 12:01:46 UTC
This was beautiful. I loved it. Thanks for sharing!

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kriari October 25 2010, 22:52:47 UTC
Thanks so much for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed.

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sweetsyren October 25 2010, 14:14:13 UTC
This was epic. I was drawn in from the first chapter. The language and the feeling behind it was so beautiful and believable.

Genius. Absolute genius.

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kriari October 25 2010, 22:53:35 UTC
*blushes*

Thank you! Glad to have obliged.

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thegrrrl2002 October 25 2010, 15:31:01 UTC
Oh, this is wonderful! I loved every word of it. Such a deliciously slow build with the angst and the wondering and the yearning. Beautiful!

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kriari October 25 2010, 22:54:34 UTC
Thank you! I enjoy a good slow build when I can pull it off :)

Glad to hear you loved it so.

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cassiopeia7 October 25 2010, 20:56:50 UTC
&hearts&hearts&hearts

You have such a gloriously beautiful way of weaving mere words into such tangible, real worlds of emotion, want, and need. I get lost in your fics every single time. Loved the way everything resolved at the end, and at the same time, I hated to see it all come to an end.

Good God, woman, can you write or what? This was absolutely, positively worth the wait. Thank you!

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kriari October 25 2010, 22:55:55 UTC
XD

Thank you so, so much. I was both excited and sad when it ended myself. I didn't know what to do, actually. I'd lived with the story so long.

I'm so, so glad it was worth the wait. No, thank you!

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jimandblair October 25 2010, 22:17:20 UTC
I find it hard to put into words how interesting I find this story. I love the way that it unfolds. I like your use of Jensen's firmly entrenched POV that allows detailed examination of what is perceived but the big picture is obscured.

I need to read it again

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kriari October 25 2010, 23:02:36 UTC
I do hope it's interesting-good rather than interesting-bad. I'm a bit of a sucker for unreliable narrators and using tight POV to hide the mechanics of the story so the reader discovers it as the character does. It gets difficult at times, knowing the rest and making sure to convey as much of what the other characters are thinking/feeling as I can without stepping outside that singular POV. This would be a much simpler story were it told from a different POV, I think. In this case, while a sense of the big picture is important, I didn't want it to overshadow the other journey. Especially since I felt the emotional through-line was much stronger than the mystery.

I won't dissuade you. I'm always up for discussions on structure/POV. And I am always very good at offering up long-winded replies. :)

Thank you!

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jimandblair October 26 2010, 22:42:49 UTC
rest assured Good Interesting!

I'm still pondering what I'm pondering *g* especially with respect to single POV as a tool rather than a constraint.

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kriari October 27 2010, 01:20:53 UTC
Good, good.

Ponder away! It was kind of freeing, honestly. And even as much as you use limited POV as a tool, it will still be something of a constraint.

Like I would love to have written when Misha makes the decision to come clean. And when Jared catches Misha folding and their diabolical plan is hatched. Their crosstalk in the backseat on the way up to Squamish. And when Misha's hiding out in the bushes at Buntzen with the dragon and calls Jared so he doesn't have to blow his cover.

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