Silence Louder Than Words

[dolphin_88]

Ok, so here we go! This is my original story, or, at least, this is the first chapter of it. I'll try and post a chapter a week, every Tuesday. I hope you like it. (This is just the first chapter, I know it might not be very inviting and interesting at the beginning). Please comment to say what you think of it.

Chapter One

She was desperately

Comments

[luvatthisvolume]

I really like the first chapter though in the first paragraph you wrote a lot of "hads" in there. I think you should try and replace some of them with possibly a different word.

[dolphin_88]

You're right, I'll try and correct that in the following ones. Thanks for reading and posting a comment! :)