The poem I wrote last night that I may use Wednesday

[dragonflyer9]

The line breaks are weird and it's totally unstructured, but I like it. P.S. Read it aloud if you can

Comments

[kaseyface]

Wow Hannah.... I had no idea you were so good at poetry! This is *really* beautiful.... I want to say that the last two stanzas are my favorite, but then I look at the first ones, and I'm like, wow, those are really great too.
As for the last two lines... I really really like them, but I know what you mean about Dr. Seuss. Um, maybe replace the first "summer" with "season"? It's an important line, so there's a lot you could do with it.... hmmm

[dragonflyer9]

Cool, thanks Kasey!! Yeah, I'm gonna keep working on the last lines. Thanks for the feedback! See you soon!

[allison_kate]

*love*