Gorgeous story! Love the world that you've created with the strict rituals and how Jensen is the proud, ultimate soldier, who voluntarily surrenders to Jared's wooing :) ♥
Thank you! I'm glad that you liked it! As soon as I started writing the fic I knew I had to put rituals in. Then I had to stop and think about them. XD I love it when guys that can kick anyone's ass voluntarily submit. So damn hot. =)
I loved how Jared was CRAZY in love & lust with Jensen & willing to just about hand over his entire kingdom to attain Jensen's hand in marriage, yet when he finally "had" Jensen, Jared was such an incredible gentleman & insisted on waiting for their wedding night months away. Jared never took advantage of Jensen even when Jensen offered himself up on a platter to Jared at one point. I really liked how Jensen slowly came around to falling in love with Jared as he realized who the real man was.
My favorite parts were the two sparring scenes between them & how each one ended with that hot kiss - initiated by Jared at the end of the competition the first time & then by Jensen the second time around. Both "fights" were written like foreplay leading up to those sensuous, heated kisses!
Gah. My first instinct was to just porn but then I thought about it and realized that there was just no way that Jensen was willingly jumping in Jared's bed without a hell of a lot of resentment so poor Jared had to wait. XD
Haha, I'm glad that the fight scenes worked! I imagine that that is just how their life goes. =P Jensen gets Jared down in the ring and smacks him around for awhile before he lets Jared top him.
I finally made it here! I made sure to wait until I knew I could read the whole thing without distraction and I'm SO glad I did, because I could barely look away as it is!
My dear, if this was rushed, I certainly didn't notice one iota. I thought it flowed beautifully, and I was honestly completely captivated the whole way through! It was everything I could possibly have hoped for! I loved that Jared was completely smitten and that all the people around him knew it (lol at Peter!). All the efforts he made to know Jensen's customs were so endearing~. And while I was sad that Jensen was given the wrong impression (I was revelling in the angst, right there!), I'm glad Jared was able to win him over in the end! All the happiness! ALL THE EMOTIONS! *wibbles* And then Jensen comes back in the night and rides Jared into oblivion! Jensen is just the best! XD
How do I deal with all these wonderful thinnnggs. Thank you thank you, I just enjoyed the hell outta this, I can't tell you! *douses you in love and kisses* ♥♥♥
I'm so glad that you liked it! I rewrote the damn thing like three, four times. Hell, I still want to rewrite it. I kind of fell in love with the concept of Jensen the proud warrior and Jared the lovelorn king.
As for the end, I wrote that when both the boys were being bitches and I was, like, fine, but you know what? I want to write some goddamned porn, so I'm going to write some porn. ...I still kind of want to do their wedding night. Jared wants to be all smooth and suave, but he's kind of bumbling about it and a little too overexcited because, gods, literally months of foreplay! Jensen's a little too eager too and their first time just goes a little awkward and way too quick. Then when Jared's fumbling about trying to ask for another shot, Jensen just pushes him down and goes for it and Jared's like "Oh, okay, yes. Yes, I'm good with this."
I will forever LOVE your beautiful writing and I'm forever grateful you're still writing in this fandom ♥ this was absolutely gorgeous, there isn't enough of this trope and I was thrilled to see YOU had written it. just beautifully done, BB, it was a true joy to read your wonderful Jared and Jensen ♥♥ I still MISS YOU ♥ hope you're doing well ♥
Jared and Jensen and Sam and Dean will forever hold a spot inside my heart. They were complete bitches while I was writing this, though. It kept going off the rails and I kept having to go back and rewrite entire sections.
I need to bracket out time to write, really, because it comes down to being time for me. My job is just sucking all the joy out of life sometimes and I don't want to be a statistic (which is that over half the people in my profession burn out before they make it 5 years). Next year, it's supposed to be easier, though.
I hope that you're doing well as well! I'm sorry that I don't spend as much time on LJ as I used to. It kind of blew my mind and made me sad how little I actually wrote this year.
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those two will be quite formidable together! Really fabulous work!
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Wonderful story. I like this "theme."
I loved how Jared was CRAZY in love & lust with Jensen & willing to just about hand over his entire kingdom to attain Jensen's hand in marriage, yet when he finally "had" Jensen, Jared was such an incredible gentleman & insisted on waiting for their wedding night months away. Jared never took advantage of Jensen even when Jensen offered himself up on a platter to Jared at one point. I really liked how Jensen slowly came around to falling in love with Jared as he realized who the real man was.
My favorite parts were the two sparring scenes between them & how each one ended with that hot kiss - initiated by Jared at the end of the competition the first time & then by Jensen the second time around. Both "fights" were written like foreplay leading up to those sensuous, heated kisses!
Thank you for writing this!
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Gah. My first instinct was to just porn but then I thought about it and realized that there was just no way that Jensen was willingly jumping in Jared's bed without a hell of a lot of resentment so poor Jared had to wait. XD
Haha, I'm glad that the fight scenes worked! I imagine that that is just how their life goes. =P Jensen gets Jared down in the ring and smacks him around for awhile before he lets Jared top him.
Thanks for reading!
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My dear, if this was rushed, I certainly didn't notice one iota. I thought it flowed beautifully, and I was honestly completely captivated the whole way through! It was everything I could possibly have hoped for! I loved that Jared was completely smitten and that all the people around him knew it (lol at Peter!). All the efforts he made to know Jensen's customs were so endearing~. And while I was sad that Jensen was given the wrong impression (I was revelling in the angst, right there!), I'm glad Jared was able to win him over in the end! All the happiness! ALL THE EMOTIONS! *wibbles* And then Jensen comes back in the night and rides Jared into oblivion! Jensen is just the best! XD
How do I deal with all these wonderful thinnnggs. Thank you thank you, I just enjoyed the hell outta this, I can't tell you! *douses you in love and kisses* ♥♥♥
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As for the end, I wrote that when both the boys were being bitches and I was, like, fine, but you know what? I want to write some goddamned porn, so I'm going to write some porn. ...I still kind of want to do their wedding night. Jared wants to be all smooth and suave, but he's kind of bumbling about it and a little too overexcited because, gods, literally months of foreplay! Jensen's a little too eager too and their first time just goes a little awkward and way too quick. Then when Jared's fumbling about trying to ask for another shot, Jensen just pushes him down and goes for it and Jared's like "Oh, okay, yes. Yes, I'm good with this."
I'm still thinking that I might add more to this.
But, still, yay, Merry Christmas, right? =D Thank you.
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I need to bracket out time to write, really, because it comes down to being time for me. My job is just sucking all the joy out of life sometimes and I don't want to be a statistic (which is that over half the people in my profession burn out before they make it 5 years). Next year, it's supposed to be easier, though.
I hope that you're doing well as well! I'm sorry that I don't spend as much time on LJ as I used to. It kind of blew my mind and made me sad how little I actually wrote this year.
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