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dreamy_idealist

Brigit's Flame - December 2008 - Week 1

Dec 06, 2008 17:03

brigits_flame is back.

This week's topic is UNITY.

Thanks for reading. Hope you'll like it! Feedback appreciated.

1,048 words, under the 1,500 words maximum requirement.

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writing, one shot, brigit's flame

Comments 4

intermezzo_poet December 7 2008, 16:23:48 UTC

"unalloyed joy."

I like that. A lot.

Great work.

Edit harlotbug3 December 10 2008, 19:51:13 UTC

[I’ve got an excuse for the time it’s taken to deliver your edit, but I’ll bet you’d rather have your edit. My style is fairly straightforward, just imagine that the [brackets] contain my red pen ( ... )

edit part 2 harlotbug3 December 10 2008, 19:51:37 UTC

Instead, he waited for a sign, an invitation, and it came [in the form of words.=delete ( ... )

n5iln December 12 2008, 20:29:20 UTC

You've got a good sense of dialog, and a good means of building tension between characters ( ... )