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drippedonpaper

Coming Down Before Carraba's: The Place I Can Never Be

Feb 14, 2010 19:49

The crimson blood always seems to mock me. Nausea rose in my throat as I remembered each time I was left with only stains of blood, clear reminders of the emptiness of dreams. Each time I cursed this broken body incapable, it seemed, of giving, only skilled in letting go. Sometimes I wish I could let go of this part of me, this place inside that ( Read more... )

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pixiebelle February 16 2010, 03:29:17 UTC

Great intersection. Wow. This was wonderful.

drippedonpaper February 16 2010, 21:05:43 UTC

Java_fiend was a great writer to work with, I think his help definitely made my writing stronger.

Thanks so much for your encouraging comments!:)

alycewilson February 16 2010, 08:05:42 UTC

This gives me chills.

drippedonpaper February 16 2010, 21:06:36 UTC

::hands you a blanket::

Thanks for reading and commenting!:)

joeymichaels February 16 2010, 10:21:44 UTC

What's that Oscar Wilde quote about writing? "Kill your darlings?"

I think this makes the story much more interesting and I'm filled with curiosity about what Patrick does now.

Well done!

drippedonpaper February 16 2010, 21:08:21 UTC

The unpredictable is interesting:) Of course, only you could be awesome enough to kill AND garbage disposal them. Maybe next time, LOL.

I really appreciate your comments, considering what a great writer you are yourself:)

puppetmaker40 February 16 2010, 15:19:31 UTC

I, like some others, read java-fiend before reading yours so I had some foreknowledge of the events that you were presenting.

That being said, this is a very strong entry and a very compelling read.

drippedonpaper February 16 2010, 21:09:53 UTC

Yes, we did talk about trying to make sure people read mine first but it seems to be working ok this way.

Thanks so much for your kind words!:)

libra_dragon February 16 2010, 15:39:34 UTC

I really should have read yours first....but even reading it after it is still amazing.

You did a fantastic job with getting the pain of ttc'ing out there and the excitement of finally getting that positive.

The ending...just like a mentioned in java's, wow...so sad, so heartbreaking.

drippedonpaper February 16 2010, 21:12:02 UTC

I don't know if you have/do struggle with ttc. I went through 2 years and 10 mos of that h-ll and it is SO hard. Every month, the hope..and the disappointment.

So while it is a fiction story, I did channel in a lot of the emotions of my past.

Thanks so much for commenting!:)