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Spooked challenge by china shop

Oct 28, 2009 10:04

Frannie gen, 500 words, G-rated. Character death.
Thanks and more thanks to mergatrude for beta.

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akuni October 28 2009, 17:23:57 UTC

Oh, that kind of hurt, I'm sad that the Vecchio kids had such parents. But Frannie is lovely, and she'll be a great mother, so that makes it all better. :)

china_shop October 28 2009, 20:01:52 UTC

Yeah. I kind of think Ma Vecchio expresses love through scolding, and that Frannie implicitly understands that, but yeah. Hard.

Thanks so much! :-D

exbex October 29 2009, 00:51:54 UTC

Very nicely done :)

china_shop October 29 2009, 07:06:58 UTC

Thanks! :-)

love_jackianto October 29 2009, 19:23:48 UTC

What a great story! I don't think I ever seen a ma ghost in this fandom (except for Bob's mom and Fraser's mom, but they're canon so they don't really count). It kind of makes me want to write something about RayK's mom haunting him.

china_shop October 29 2009, 21:15:05 UTC

Thanks!

It kind of makes me want to write something about RayK's mom haunting him.

Oh, that'd be interesting! You should! (I've toyed with the idea of Kowalski's dad haunting him, and Fraser and Vecchio shrugging and saying, "Hey, it's happens." But I hadn't thought of killing off Barbara. *g*)

love_jackianto October 29 2009, 21:36:46 UTC

'(I've toyed with the idea of Kowalski's dad haunting him, and Fraser and Vecchio shrugging and saying, 'Hey, it's happens.' But I hadn't thought of killing off Barbara. *g*)'
That would be so cool. I can just see Ray Vecchio going, 'at least your pop's not jerk' to Ray Kowalski.

'Oh, that'd be interesting! You should!'
I might, it depends on if my muse sticks around long enough.

mizface November 11 2009, 19:54:29 UTC

I don't know why I didn't comment on this when you first posted, but oh well.

This is just lovely. Having Ma Vecchio haunt Frannie is inspired, and the dialogue is terrific, as are the little details (like the crooked shawl) that make this so easy to see happening.

I think what i like best is the feeling of love and caring threaded throughout the entire piece.

china_shop November 11 2009, 20:46:31 UTC

Aww, thanks! :-D I really like the idea of Frannie being happy and settled and having a home. (Which is not to say she couldn't have a career, too, of course.) \o/

verushka70 November 23 2009, 01:08:19 UTC

Ow. Ouch. This is so believable within the DS canon of Fraser, Sr. and Vecchio, Sr. Poor Frannie. You hit all the right notes for a spooky, angsty story, with a kind of happy end. \o/

china_shop November 23 2009, 01:26:37 UTC

Thanks so much! :-D