a poem...and a rather lousy one at that

[blck_phnx]

The following is a poem I submitted to a poetry contest earlier...sometime during the school year, in the early hours of the morning when everything makes sense and the idiocy of my action didn't hit home until sometime that evening

Comments

[aldecoary]

You have a lot of provokative images and beautiful language. As was drilled into me last semester, though.....quit being so vague. What's this poem really about? We can only guess. Might be more powerful if it's more concrete--it'll bring up even more emotions than it already does. Reminds me of the Dead Marshes from Lord of the Rings.

[blck_phnx]

Vague?? I didn't really have anything particular in mind when I wrote this...(though, I'll admit, I had been thinking about the Dead Marshes from LotR that day...)

[garowyn]

Very descriptive. I like it.

[blck_phnx]

Thanks! ^_^