It’s not uncommon for a remix to be better than the original story. Given the talent of an author like deird1, however, it becomes markedly less likely. Even so, I think you may have pulled it off here. The format she used, and the way she followed it out, was quite effective … and you took the exact same format, chose and applied different examples, and accomplished just as much if not more.
(And the humorous bit, Duncan MacLeod vs the Fonz? That was a good laugh while not detracting a whit from the point you were making. Wesley was growing - and, given her unexpected perceptiveness, so was Cordelia - and this illustrated a stage of that growth.)
I'm glad it worked. One of the reasons I get blocked as much as I do is I get the sense my wording is getting clunky and it tends to stop me in my tracks until I can regroup. Obviously, I *had* to get this story done, so I just did the best I could and hoped for the best. Hopefully, the others (and particularly deird1) find it as enjoyable.
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(And the humorous bit, Duncan MacLeod vs the Fonz? That was a good laugh while not detracting a whit from the point you were making. Wesley was growing - and, given her unexpected perceptiveness, so was Cordelia - and this illustrated a stage of that growth.)
Well done. Congratulations.
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Warmest Regards,
M. Scott Eiland
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I loved the way you used the same "steps" for different viewpoints on Wesley. I enjoyed the fic a lot.
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