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adoptedwriter May 7 2017, 23:02:47 UTC
Whoaaaa!

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ellakite May 7 2017, 23:10:06 UTC
... is that good or bad?

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adoptedwriter May 8 2017, 01:23:32 UTC
Definitely good!

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ellakite May 10 2017, 01:02:45 UTC
Thanks for confirming it -- I always worry that such a dark twist will make some readers dislike tales like this one...

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murielle May 8 2017, 03:34:14 UTC
You did it again! You totally got me. There I was reading along, wondering how in the world you were going to fix your fix, and then BANG! You lowered the boom.

Excellent as always. Fantastic twist at the end. Bravo!

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ellakite May 8 2017, 13:50:31 UTC
What 'twist' are you talking about? My approach to fixing the issue was an obvious one. As my father used to say: "There is no personal problem which cannot be solved through a suitable application of high explosives."

glad you enjoyed it... and thanks for the feedback.

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tonithegreat May 9 2017, 01:34:51 UTC
Mwahahaha! Or maybe just, okay, time to go on with my day. You're terrible! This was delightful.

Also, in light of current events, it's refreshing to read something where everyone is worked up about the surprise possibility of a public school spending a bunch of money one way or another on a troubled kid.

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You have no idea... ellakite May 9 2017, 03:36:52 UTC
The bit about my sister getting all worked up over the possibility of her kid getting classified as a "hopeless case" actually happened... right down to my nephew getting assigned to one of the best Gifted Special Education programs in the nation. However, something that I didn't mention was that the program was in a town about 15 miles away from the one where my nephew was living. His local school board was financially responsible for busing him to the school in the other town, which cost them a fortune... and when they saw how amazing his grades were, they tried to convince my sister to put him back in the local school system. She told them where they could stick their proposal to put her son back in the "regular" school system...

Thanks for the feedback!

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rayaso May 9 2017, 20:57:26 UTC
This was great! I love what you did with it. At the beginning, I thought "what an interesting family tale," which only grew stronger and included "what natural dialog for a reconstructed memory." At the end, you totally got me, plus raising the possibility that this was the wrong family. Wonderful!

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Ain't nothing wrong with my family. ellakite May 10 2017, 00:54:23 UTC
I mean, I said in the beginning that I'd do *ANYTHING* to help another member of my family. I can't help it if you didn't believe me...

Thanks so much for the feedback.

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halfshellvenus May 10 2017, 00:01:55 UTC
SOOOOO glad this is fiction!

And why must middle-of-the-night phone calls always be that way? Why can't the panic wait until the person is sure it's necessary? Oy...

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ellakite May 10 2017, 01:00:41 UTC
Maybe it's only "fiction" because I changed the date and/or the name of the town...

And why must middle-of-the-night phone calls always be that way?

Because when people panic, they don't think rationally, and so they can't even conceive the idea of checking that they truly have reason to panic. Or, they figure that if they "waste" the time checking the facts, by the time they get confirmation that it was right for them to panic it'll be too late to try to deal with the situation...

Thanks for the feedback.

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halfshellvenus May 10 2017, 07:19:10 UTC
if they "waste" the time checking the facts
This is the scariest part, because it's SO true. Why make sure of the foundation once the instinct to "flail" has kicked in?

It's exactly what people do. Frustrating, but it is!

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